The information about the grade of education of Bulgarian who looked for a chance to live abroad

The bar chart shows about the grade of education of Bulgarian inhabitant wanted to stay abroad in 2002, 2006, and 2008. Overall, it can be seen that secondary education is the most level of the education of Bulgarians while the other levels are below a half.

Started in 2002, the percentage of higher education level stall at 17 percent and there was a slight increase by 2 percent in 2006. Unfortunately, the percentage dropped significantly to 9 percent in the next couple of years. For primary and lower education, the percentage of educational level started at 18 percent in the beginning of the period. There was a slight increase by 1 percent in the next 4-year. Fortunately, the level increased significantly to 32 percent. However, the percentage of secondary educational level remained the same at approximately 62 percent as the median. From the figures, we can see that for higher, and primary and lower education, there is no group that reached a half.

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Hi Ivan,
Here's my analysis towards your report summary of IELTS task 1. I hope you can follow through.

1st paragraph:
- The bar chart shows the information about the grade of education of Bulgarian inhabitantwho wanted...
- ... secondary education ishad the highest percentage of people who planned to leave Bulgariamost level of the education of Bulgarians while the other levels of educationarewere below a half.

- Where's the third sentence? Can you even call it an acceptable paragraph if it is below 3 sentences? Even in your own native language (Indonesian Language), a paragraph should consist of at least 4-5 sentences.

2nd paragraph:
- ... of higher education level stalled at 17 percent and there was...
- For primary and lower education, the percentage of educational levelthey(you have stated "primary and lower". I am sure that "they" would be adequate) started at 18 percent in the beginning of the period.(I am not sure that this one is appropriate phrase for body paragraph. I think that this kind of phrase should be used in introductory paragraph.)

As you can see Ivan, several remarks and inputs have been given. I hope you can gain some improvements in the next practice. Good luck :)

Hello ivan! I will give you some opinions about your essay.

(1) ... grade of education of Bulgarian inhabitantcitizens who wanted to stay abroad
(2) Overall, it can be seen that the percentage of secondary education is the most levelhighest ratio of the education of Bulgarians while ...
(3) ... of higher education level stallstood at 17 percent
(4) ... of secondary educational level remained the samedecreased slightly at approximately ...
(5) From the figures, we can see that for higher, and primary and lower education, there is no group that reached a half.
You have mentioned it in your 'overview'