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The information regarding to the changes in UK school's funds usage in 1981, 1991 and 2001.



septiadara29 48 / 45  
Nov 5, 2016   #1
This three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

Writing Task 1


A breakdown of the information regarding to the changes in UK school's expenditure for each year over three-year decades is depicted in three pie charts. It is measured by percentage. Overall, it is immediately apparent that the figure of teacher's incomes was always be the largest in every year and the toal spending of furniture and equipment had hit the highest level in 2007.

According to the data, the largest starting ratio was teacher wage that stood at two-fifths in 1981. Although it went up and down over three decade, the greatest proportion reached a peak at 50% in 1991. The percentage of resources experienced the same trend and projected at 20% during same period and fell suddenly by 11% in 2001. Henceforth, 28% expenditure for other workers' income continued to decrease steadily at 15% in 2001.

Concerning the remain parts, although the figure of furniture went down dramatically to 5% in 1991, it started rising significantly by 18% in 2001. Moreover, the smallest proportion witnessed in insurance and it growth markedly from 2% in 1991 to 8% in 2001. (180 words)


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badafebriani17 34 / 41  
Nov 7, 2016   #2
Hello septiadara
actually you have good essay but let me give you some suggestions.
1. in academic writing you should write numbers up to ten as words (five, two etc) and write numbers over ten as pictures (2001, 15 etc)
... went down dramatically to 5% [five percent] in 1991, ...
... it growth markedly from 2% [two percent] in 1991 to 8% [eight percent] in 2001.
... down over three decade(s), the greatest proportion ...
It is measured by (the) percentage.
overall, i can understand your essay easily. well done. good luck


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