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The information about how much time the people of different occupations spend to sleep and awake



AhmadNashran 9 / 12  
Oct 30, 2016   #1
The given chart gives the information about how much of time the people spend to sleep and awake regarding five different occupations in an entire day. Overall, it can be seen that the people who work as a doctor have the least sleep times.

Turning first to the doctor, during 24 hours, the doctor only allocates their five hours to sleep, namely at 1 until 7 a.m. which they wake an hour between 3 and 4 a.m. Then, it followed by people who have a job to be a truck driver and business executive which for these jobs need an hour longer than the doctor. Yet, there is the differentiation of schedule between both of them. As the business executive, their five hours of sleep they perform at 11 p.m. until 5 a.m. sequentially. Interestingly, the people job as a truck driver has the varied bedtime which sleeps an hour at 6 p.m. and wakes for twelve hours before they start to sleep for three hours at 7-10 a.m. and their last two hours at 4-6 p.m.

In addition, the occupations which have the opportunity to sleep longer are the student and housewife. Anyone who has these statuses sleeps for eight hours. However, the student starts sleeping at 11 p.m. until 7 a.m. sequentially, while as a full-time mother starts sleeping an hour earlier than student during the first three hours. Furthermore, they continue to have a sleep for three hours at 3-6 a.m. before they sleep again at 1-3 p.m. after they wake for seven hours to do their job.

ainunazwaria 10 / 17  
Oct 30, 2016   #2
Hai.AhmadNashran

I have some comments about your writing :

1. ... who have a job to be a truck driver ... --> "as" is proper word related to your sentence context.
2. Interestingly, the people job as a truck driver has --> The sentence structure is not appropriate. Here is my suggestion "the people with job as truck driver" or "the people who work as truck driver". After that, "has" should changed with "have" because the people is plural form.

3. starts sleeping an hour earlier --> "start to sleep for an hour"


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