Information war in my motherland, Ukraine. Small essay about mass media (302 words)

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:We need to have different sources of news and information to know which one is the real or who is telling the truth.

This is my essay for TOEFL exam. My English is not so good, so I will be very grateful for all comments.

Essay:

It is undeniable fact that information is very powerful thing, which can connect hearts and ignite wars,it is also a major tool of world ruling. Thus getting right information is very crucial.

We live in the century of exploded information, where almost everyone has an access to different sources all over the world: we have newspapers, magazines ,radio, TV and the most important - the Internet. Unfortunately all this variety sometimes can lead to undesirable result, as information war, as it is now happening in my motherland, Ukraine. If you read everyday's news you may know that there is a big tension between Russia and Ukraine, and two countries' common citizents believe in their own truth. All Russian information resources are broadcasting a story that Russia is a neutral party in a conflict and Ukrainian politicians play a hard game, Ukrainian media ,in it's turn, exposed Russian "evil" actions. Citizens suppressed by this media information started getting on one of two sides.

My point is that it is very difficult task to tell the truth from lie, specifically nowadays.All the information which we see, hear, belongs to someone, who has rights to change the truth before posting it; media is gatekeeper who filter everything before it go public.

Make no bones it is easy to believe in lies. There is one Chinese proverb saying "Three men make a tiger", it means that if three people tell you the same lie you will finally believe that it is the common truth, moreover your imagination and physiological nature will help you to "see" unexisted tiger.

In the end I want to say: keep your eyes open but before making any conclusions listen to your heart. A tremendous amount of information often does not reveal the real situation but just confuse the receiver and take him away from the reliable sources.

Can you provide us with full prompt please?
It is undeniable fact that information is very powerful thing, which can connect hearts and ignite wars,it is also a major tool of world ruling. Thus getting right information is very crucial.--> an introduction opens with a motivator, followed by a thesis statement and finally your opinion if the topic is "agree or disagree". When you talk about wars triggered by "information", I, as a reader, expect to read the thesis statement to understand what you meant by wars and find out over what issues the essay is revolving.

We live in the century ofThe contemporary era is usually called theexploded information age , wheresince almost everyone has an access to different information sources all over the world, such aswe have newspapers, magazines ,radio, TV and the most important - the Internet. Unfortunately all this variety sometimes can lead to undesirable result, asso-called information war, as it is now happening in my motherland, Ukraine. If you read everyday's news you may know that there is a big tension between Russia and Ukraine, and two countries' common citizents believe in their own truth. All Russian information resources are broadcasting a story that Russia is a neutral party in a conflict and Ukrainian politicians play a hard game, Ukrainian media ,in it's turn, exposed Russian "evil" actions. Citizens suppressed by this media information started getting on one of two sides.--> I think you need to separate the concept of "propaganda" from "information war". For example, cyberattacks conducted by hackers is an example of information war, what you are talking about is the role of the media as the propaganda machines

My point is that it is very difficult task to tell the truth from lie, specifically nowadays.All the information which we see, hear, belongs to someone, who has rights to change the truth before posting it; media is gatekeeper who filter everything before it goes public.

Make no bones it is easy to believe in lies. There is one Chinese proverb sayingsays "Three men make a tiger", it means that if three people tell you the same lie you will finally believe that it is the common truth, moreover your imagination and physiological nature will help you to "see" non-existent OR imaginary tiger.

In the end I want to say: keep your eyes open but before making any conclusions listen to your heart. A tremendous amount of information often does not reveal the real situation but just confuse the receiver and take him away from the reliable sources.

Hope this helps
Cheers,
Ahmad

Ahmad, sorry I forgot to add prompt.
Prompt:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:We need to have different sources of news and information to know which one is the real or who is telling the truth.

Ahmad, thank you for your great comments, now I can see the difference between information war and propaganda))) Thank u

OK, the topic is an "agree or disagree" one. at the end of the introduction you need to clearly declare your agreement or disagreement with the topic, and then write a blueprint. The blueprint provides the reader with clues that over what issues your are going to discuss in the body.

Thanks for your help. Yes i now see i haven't mentioned i agree or not. I need to pay attention to it

OK I copied an example from the book "practical writing with reading" below:
Do you realize that newly born children are not even aware that parts of their bodies belong to them? I learned this fascinating fact
in my psychology course from a book that says a baby "lies on his back, kicking his heels and watching the little fists flying past his

face. But only very slowly does he come to know that they are attached to him and he can control them" (Mary Ann Spencer

Pulaski, Understanding Piaget, page 21).(Motivator)Children have a lot of learning to do before they can see the world-and themselves- through grown-up eyes. As children pass through this remarkable process of growing up, they often do some humorous things(thesis), especially in learning to speak, in discovering that all objects do not have human characteristics, and in trying to imitate others around them.(blueprint

A motivator can be a question, a proverb, a quotation, story or simply a statement that gives some general information. As you can see in the introduction above, it's been opened with a question. Opening the introduction with a question is really difficult and I don't recommend that to you as you need be really professional in writing to do it perfectly. General information is the best way of writing a motivator, as I normally do too.