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Initial teacher training qualifications of students who living in the UK between 2005/6 and 2006/7


hasbi 29 / 42 23  
Oct 4, 2015   #1
The table illustrates the proportion of initial teacher training qualifications of students who living in the UK between 2005/6 and 2006/7. Overall, it can be seen that in the exception of PGCE, all of ITT figures increased sharply in the last year.

In 2005/6, total teaching qualifications obtained stood at 31.390 with proportion 23.865 for female and 8.065 for male. Next year, while the total of this figure grow slightly by 15, there was a slightly increased of the number of male at around 7.610 while female reached a peak to 24.335. On the other hand, total of PGCE fell gradually from 24.405 in 2005/6 to 23.900 in 2006/7. This case followed by female and male at around 1.5 % by male.

Furthermore, Bed and other degrees showed low percentage of ITT qualification was that approximately 14.5% male. Total of this group rose steadily by 480 in 2006/7, with proportion 6.920 for female and 1125 for male.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Oct 4, 2015   #2
Hasbi, I'd like to caution you about your overview of the report. While I realize that you feel the whole thing can be summarized in two sentences, it is important that you deliver the same in at least 3 sentences in order to insure that you have delivered the expected minimum sentence requirement for the paragraph. Delivering less than that could affect your score.

The report you made shows a good understanding of the chart. Aside from a few grammar issues that I will be correcting for you later, you should not worry about the clarity of your report. It is easily understood and answers all possible questions regarding the chart. I am confident that you will be able to improve your writing skills even farther in due time and with practice.

Now, for the corrections:

training qualifications of students who LIVED in the UK

THE CHART SHOWS THAT WITH the exception

all of THE ITT

In 2005/6,THE total teaching

with A proportion OF 23.865 for female and 8.065 for male

THE next year

there was a slightly increasedof IN the number

of maleS

while femaleS

PEAKED AT 24.335.

hand,THE total of PGCE

This case WAS followed by femaleS and maleS at around 1.5 % by maleS.

degrees showed A low percentage of ITT qualificationS AT approximately 14.5% maleS.

THE total of this group

with A proportion OF 6.920 for femaleS and 1125 for maleS.
Bayuwibowo 48 / 73 21  
Oct 4, 2015   #3
Hasbi,

I try to re-written your introduction :

The table illustrates the proportion of initial teacher training qualifications of students who living in the UK between 2005/6 and 2006/7. Overall, it can be seen that in the exception of PGCE, all of ITT figures increased sharply in the last year.

This table describes the number of students in United Kingdoms who obtain a qualification in teachers training between 2005/6 and 2006/7. Overall, it can be seen that the percentages of female students dominated in all training. In any case, ITT figures slightly increased in this time frame.


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