By the advent of globlization and increased tourisim promotion, many peple start to travel across world frequently.
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its hotel industry, transportation, local business all flourishes .
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More over, tourism also enhance the infrastructural development of itsa country in order to welcome the influx of travellers, which eventually benefits well the local facilities and people to achieve a accomplished life style.
You present very smart reasons in this paragraph. However, your examples seem to be a bit more general and not so specific. This task expects specific reasons and examples. So, pay attention to that fact.You can pick one of the things you said in this para and expand on it. For example, take the line;
For instance, when a country receives tourists all over the world, its hotel industry, transportation, local business all flourishes.
Then expand on this idea by giving a more specific example to show how these industries prosper.
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