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Thanks to the Internet, the word "friendship" has a much broader meaning now.



rhj 2 / 3  
Mar 29, 2013   #1
Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.
Thanks to the Internet, the word "friendship" has a much broader meaning now. No longer are the bonds of friendship limited to telephone conversations, shared activities, or speaking face-to-face. In this day and age, very close friendships can be formed without the people ever meeting and by simply typing words on a screen.

Adapted from Sharon Hendricks, "A Broader Definition of Friendship"
Assignment: Is it easier now than ever before to form friendships? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your reasoning with examples taken from your reading, studies, experiences or observations.

ESSAY:

Internet has become a crucial part of our lives. We are getting more and more dependent on this technology. The benefits of internet are not just limited to various professional needs. Personally, internet helps people around the globe to stay connected with each other all the time.

People who are busy achieving their professional goals while balancing their family lives, internet provides them with the opportunity to not only make new friends but also keep the old ones. However, in my opinion, it might also create a kind loneliness in your life when you don't get to see and hear your friends. I strongly feel that lifelong memories are created when you spend time with your friends doing some fun activities, playing games, dinning out or by just walking on the beach. Long distance friendship can be maintained on the internet once the deep bond between two friends is formed by spending time together. Internet cannot provide you with such experiences.

Friends can share with each other details about their professional achievements, personal milestones, adventure stories on the internet but only when the bonding exist. I believe such real and unique bond cannot happen sitting in front of the computer screen. Real friendships are created by being with each other.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Mar 29, 2013   #2
Internet has become a crucial part of our lives.

Internet has become almost an integral part of our lives.

We are getting more and more dependent on this technology.

Day by day, our dependence on this communication technology grows intensely.

Internet has become a crucial part of our lives. We are getting more and more dependent on this technology. The benefits of internet are not just limited to various professional needs. Personally, internet helps people around the globe to stay connected with each other all the time.

.... This is very good and those are just my suggestions :)

PeopleFor people who are busy achieving their professional goals while balancing their family lives, internet provides them with the opportunity to not only make new friends but also keep the old ones live .

it might also create a kind of loneliness in your life when you don't get to see and hear your friends.

it might also create an environment that people would be distanced from physical interactions with others while becoming severely dependent on devices for every emotional need.


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