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Here are the prompt and instructions:
The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Here is my essay:
For a nation to be considered great, we often look at the country's economic achievements, and almost forget to weight the people's level of satisfaction and the society's happiness. Although a nation that produces the more outstanding individuals will most likely be perceived as great worldwide, the ultimate goal of a nation should serve interests of the general and majority. A closer examination at the propensity, welfare and people's satisfaction of different nations in our world supports the statement.
Northern Europe has long been a desirable place to live for people around the world, so it is intuitive to presume nations in the region relatively great. Countries like Denmark, Sweden or Switzland are renowned for their stable and joyful life. Certainly, these countries are not necessarily the hometown of world-famous individuals, at least in comparison with other nations. Yet the nations' people enjoy the safe and stable environment that underscores the welfare of everyone in the society. This is an unarguable indicator of prospective nations.
There is no denying that United States shelters the largest number of exceptional individuals, whose achievements are world-recognized in many areas of life. A quick check at the nationality of Nobel laureates confirms the argument. However, the States never shows up in the top-ten happiest countries in the world, or obtains a relatively high human index (an index to measure the welfare of people in health, education or age). Obviously, the world largest economy still exemplifies a great nation, but not an undoubted and fully one, at least according to its people's self assessments.
This essay narrows the broad term of great nation to the social aspects to make the arguments valid. Despite the immense contributions that excellent individuals make to one nation, the general welfare of its people must be overweighed to assess the greatness of a nation. The reasoning and evidence shown in this essay can be used to strengthen this prompt.
Here are the prompt and instructions:
The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Here is my essay:
For a nation to be considered great, we often look at the country's economic achievements, and almost forget to weight the people's level of satisfaction and the society's happiness. Although a nation that produces the more outstanding individuals will most likely be perceived as great worldwide, the ultimate goal of a nation should serve interests of the general and majority. A closer examination at the propensity, welfare and people's satisfaction of different nations in our world supports the statement.
Northern Europe has long been a desirable place to live for people around the world, so it is intuitive to presume nations in the region relatively great. Countries like Denmark, Sweden or Switzland are renowned for their stable and joyful life. Certainly, these countries are not necessarily the hometown of world-famous individuals, at least in comparison with other nations. Yet the nations' people enjoy the safe and stable environment that underscores the welfare of everyone in the society. This is an unarguable indicator of prospective nations.
There is no denying that United States shelters the largest number of exceptional individuals, whose achievements are world-recognized in many areas of life. A quick check at the nationality of Nobel laureates confirms the argument. However, the States never shows up in the top-ten happiest countries in the world, or obtains a relatively high human index (an index to measure the welfare of people in health, education or age). Obviously, the world largest economy still exemplifies a great nation, but not an undoubted and fully one, at least according to its people's self assessments.
This essay narrows the broad term of great nation to the social aspects to make the arguments valid. Despite the immense contributions that excellent individuals make to one nation, the general welfare of its people must be overweighed to assess the greatness of a nation. The reasoning and evidence shown in this essay can be used to strengthen this prompt.