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GRE Issue Topic : "All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the


KKmadan 1 / 1 1  
Nov 22, 2016   #1
"All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the company to operate more efficiently. If companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees, such consultants would be unnecessary."

Now a days consultancies are increasing day by day. Their work is to provide consultations, advises, services and opinions to other company who hire their services. Though companies can not totally rely on consultancies for suggestions as they are outsiders, they must consult with their own employees because they know organization in a better way.

As Consultancies are proficient in their fields and they provide services to various companies, so they have good experience in there field. Getting services from the consultancies is a good option and hiring them for better view points and suggestions are increasing day by day. A company which has no department or no experienced employee in a particular area than it is better to hire a consultant rather than wasting a time to hire a full time employee or to spend time in listening to their own employee who don't have prior experience about the matter.

For Instance, a company have to deliver a project within short span of time but to complete the project, a company need pundit for the fulfillment of the project but they lack in experienced employee so they can't wait for their employees to be trained and then they will apply their knowledge to finish that task, In these scenarios, hiring proficient consultants from outside is better opinion. They will share their knowledge and experience and once task is delivered, they will leave the company. Hence in this way company will benefited by consultant.

Secondly, In an organization where they have to make a very big decision, lot of money is involved in the project. For successful completion of that project, they sometime need second opinions, profound suggestions from expertise in that area for that they hire a consultants from outside but a company on the other hand never neglect their employees. They do consider their own employees viewpoint and suggestions. As they very well understand their organization and they have spend years in the company. A company in this situation can't totally depend on outside person, though they take suggestions but they also welcome their own employee view point as well.

So, it totally depend upon the situation whether existing employee efficacy is enough to deal with situation or not. If not they can hire consultants for transient, take expert opinion and get advantages from their services.

Holt - / 7,608 2001  
Nov 23, 2016   #2
In terms of quality of ideas, you won't score more than a 2 because you offer conflicting ideas in your essay. In your opening statement, you take the side that the company should listen to their employees. Then throughout the body of your essay, you discuss the importance of hiring consultants for the company benefit in comparison with listening to the employees. You do not defend your stance that the company should listen to their employees opinion in any paragraph. Then, in your conclusion, you again change your mind and say that the idea of listening to a consultant should be on a case to case basis. You need to pick a side and make sure to develop the essay within the vein the prompt provides.

Organization would clock in at a 3. Your discussion is poorly organized because you could not decide on which side you actually wished to support in your essay. Due to your confusion, your discussion suffered and could not reflect a proper flow of thought.

The writing style and grammar would probably have to settle for a score of 1. You have not shown a solid writing style and the lack of properly worded sentences make it difficult for the reader to decipher your true intentions behind the paragraph.

Your summary would score no higher than an A2 as your summary was affected by the way that you discussed the essay in totality. your summary doesn't reflect the kind of discussion that you are providing.

BTW, next time, please include the complete and original prompt for our reference. That way we can more accurately score your essay. I did not score you in increments as there are some other criteria that the examiner will be considering or recognizing in your essay that I may have missed. I am just offering you a base score for each section of grading at this point.
kaun 2 / 5  
Nov 23, 2016   #3
Hi @KKmadan, I would like to suggest you some corrections.

- Now a days ---> nowadays
- ...they must consult with their own employees because ...
- ...they have good experience in theretheir field...
- ... rather than wasting a time to hire a full-time employee or to spend ...
- ... knowledge and experience, and once the/a task is delivered, ...
Hence in this way the/a company will benefited by the/a consultant.

- ..lots of money is involved ...
- ...they sometimes need second opinions, (...) that they hire a consultants from the outside but a ...
- ...They do consider their own employees viewpoint and suggestions...
-...So, it totally depends upon the situation (...) to deal with the/a situation or not...take a expert opinion and get ...
OP KKmadan 1 / 1 1  
Nov 23, 2016   #4
@holt Thanks for your suggestions. I will try to improve my writing skills in next attempt. thanks for your valuable guidance.
@kaun thanks for correcting me. Though i am a beginner, i will try to give my opinion as soon as possible.
alfinkurnia 33 / 48  
Nov 23, 2016   #5
Hello this is my correction for you. feel free to correction me too.

Now a daysNowadays consultancies are increasing day by day. Their workjob is to provide consultations , advises, services (...) company who hireneed their services.

... company will benefited by consultant.
Dioba 68 / 105 7  
Nov 23, 2016   #6
Hi, below through my advice for you.
1.Now a days consultancies are increasing day by day.----> Nowadays , consultant companies are increasing day by day.
2.Though companies can notcannot totally rely on ...
3. A company which has no department or no experienced employee in a particular ...---> too long and makes you create many mistakes. my advice is divided by 2 sentences.

4. so they have good experience in there field.---> their field
5.day by day ---> repetition . try to change with as time goes on
yurikeyuri 43 / 63 2  
Nov 23, 2016   #7
Hello, let me give my correction for you

Now a days consultancies are increasing day by day Nowadays

opinions to other companycompanies who hire their services (other indicate the plural form so the word "company" must in plural form too)

so they have good experience in the there field

view pointsview point and suggestions

wasting a time to hire a full timefull-time employee or (...) employee who don'tdoesn't have prior experience ...

they hire a consultants from the outside

have spendspent


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