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IELTS 2: Will all jobs eventually be done by artificially intelligent robots? Human vs machine.



TriceLiu 11 / 25  
Aug 29, 2019   #1

AI is likely to replace repetitive jobs



Prompt:
Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion?

Answer: The development of artificial intelligence has given rise to the fear that all occupations will one day be replaced by robots. This essay will argue that although some jobs may be automated, others cannot be done by machines.

Dull and dangerous jobs are likely to be done by robots in the future. Robots that do repetitive tasks tend to require less complex programming and are, therefore, less expensive. They can be cost-effective tools to deal with monotonous tasks. In fact, some markets have already replaced cashiers with check-out machines. Artificially intelligent robots may also do work in toxic environments in the place of human workers.

However, some other jobs can never be done by machines. One example is professions that require creativity. This is because robots only carry out program instructions; they cannot generate new ideas. For example, fiction writers are unlikely to lose their job to AIs, because creativity lies at the very heart of their profession. Also, innovative engineers who develop new features for robots will not be replaced.

Jobs that entail high communication skills can only be done by humans, too. For instance, psychology consultants provide clients with emotional care. Requiring experience and sharp instincts, the job is unlikely, if not impossible, to be acquired by robots.

To conclude, in the next few years, AI is likely to replace repetitive jobs at an intimidating speed. But this does not mean it will make everyone unemployed, because jobs that involve creativity and interpersonal skills cannot be automated.

rivathh 5 / 10  
Aug 30, 2019   #2
@TriceLiu
Hi there!
Let me provide you with feedback on your writing.

You do quite well to list out lots of examples in the essay. I really appreciate that!
However, it lacks some supporting sentence after your main idea. You can try to explain more in your writing.

This essay will argue that....
I seldom see the usage of "this essay" in IELTS writing.
Perhaps you can rephrase it to "In my opinion, although..." or "I tend to agree that..."

The purposes of third and fourth paragraph seem to be similar, you can try to combine them together or add some new ideas in the fourth paragraph.The latter one is a little bit too short!

Gook luck for your learning !


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