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"The jobs we'll lose to machines and the ones we wont" Anthony Goldbloom. TED


Risty01 10 / 16 1  
Aug 11, 2016   #1
Machine learning is a cutting edge of technology that gives a dramatic breakthrough for human being. People argue that such machine will replace some of human jobs, while others say it has a limit function in novel situation.

In the early '90s, machines have developed by a simple task and it is far more complex now to do human's activity. In the past, teachers might read over thousand of essays while machine can possible to read millions of them within minutes. In 2012, Kaggle company created an algorithm that could give a grade for high-school as human teachers do. It can be concluded that machines are going to outperform human jobs.

However, machines cannot handle that they have not seen before. In result, they are possible to produce "creativity" for human activities. Currently, it can be seen that it is not making any progress because it faces situation just according to the past experience.
Wolf Larsen - / 127 47  
Aug 11, 2016   #2
Hello

I applied a few adjustments to the text so that it sounds better and makes more sense. They are as follows:

Machine learning [...] What is that? Did you mean 'computerized learning'?
that gives a dramatic [...] made possible by recent scientific breakthroughs.
Some people argue [...] that this technology will eventually result in replacing manual laborers with robots... others [...] think that such a scenario is highly unlikely.
In the early 90s [...], it became quite clear for many people that machines were going to replace humans in a number of different professional pursuits.

In the past [...] Whereas, teachers can read thousands of essays, machines (computers?) are capable of performing the same task much more efficiently.
It can be concluded [...] Therefore, it is indeed fully appropriate to conclude that machines do outperform humans in a variety of different ways.
machines cannot handle [...] the tasks that they have not been designed to address.
In result, they.. . [...] This sentence is unintelligible - you should consider removing it.
Currently, it can. ..[...] It's the same with this sentence too - I really don't understand what you're trying to say. I recommend that you should try writing simpler sentences for now.

I hope it helped. Regards.


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