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TOEFL: Keep trying and never stop working for your goals.


sntinn 8 / 36 9  
Mar 24, 2014   #1
TOEFL task 2
Question: The expression "Never, never give up" means to keep trying and never stop working for your goals. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your

reasons.

"Keep running!," shouted from my heart but my legs can hardly move. During running for 20 Kilometers in a marathon running tournament 2014, I saw some people stopped running while the others fought until their last minute. At some moment, my body was telling me to stop but the choice that I made was on the contrary. I did not stop and won a medal goals in my life at the age of nearly thirty. From this experience, I believe that a person should keep trying for his goals.

Firstly, committing to our goal helps creating personal worth. For example, I realized the true potential of my body and mind as I decided to train myself hard. Even if I were not to win this medal, I acknowledged the great amount of my endeavor as I could keep my tired legs running.

Secondly, one who learns the great difficulty will become stronger. I remembered how I was suffered in the first round when I was last person who touched the line. However, I did not give up, and believed that I would be better in the next round because I knew how to improve myself. I had been a loser for a thousand time before the first winning, and suffering from losing in each competition makes me stronger.

Thirdly, at some point, we, as an average people, might feel that the responsibility to our goal is too heavy to carry on. I believe that the responsibility is worthy of carrying. When the distance is longer and harder to achieve, a runner who can go beyond his limit will proud of himself. He can feel the sweetness of triumph because he did not stop pursing his goal.

For these reasons, I agree that one should not give up, as the true reward is to have the dignity. Anyone who wants to achieve the goal should acknowledge that his effort and experience from suffering helps him understand his true potential and increase his strength, and ultimately, it will prompt him to be ready for overcoming the greater challenge in his life.

niesaysi 16 / 284 83  
Mar 24, 2014   #2
"Keep running!," shouted from my heart when I was coachingcheering myself.

For me,this is a good hook.

My reasons to support my statement isar e as follows.

Omit this sentence. It is unnecessary.

Firstly, committing to our goal helps us creating personal worth.

Thirdly, the success that comes from our endeavor is more valuable than the one that can be obtained easily.

Excellent idea!

The test of triumph is sweeter not only because of the rewards that is high

"Rewards that are high"--what does it mean?Please rephrase it.
farther than what he thinks of himself.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 24, 2014   #3
Seems you can write well... However, there is a particular structure that we recommend for this task which includes all necessary features that you need to score on this.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Mar 24, 2014   #4
Secondly, one who learns the great difficulty will become stronger.

Secondly, the one becomes stronger when he or she faces lots of hardships and learns lessons from those experiences.

Thirdly, the success that comes from our endeavor is more valuable than the one that can be obtained easily.

What is the relevance of this idea to your prompt? Your prompt talks about keep trying and never stop working.
Follow the guideline that dumi has suggested for your introduction :)
OP sntinn 8 / 36 9  
Mar 24, 2014   #5
The test of triumph is sweeter not only because of the rewards that is high "Rewards that are high"--what does it mean? Please rephrase it.

I am sorry for the confusion. Actually, I meant to say that "It is better that a man conquers himself than that he win a reward."
OP sntinn 8 / 36 9  
Mar 24, 2014   #6
Thank you dumi. That is very kind of you. I would certainly try to improve my introduction. ^ ^

Pahan

sntinn:
Thirdly, the success that comes from our endeavor is more valuable than the one that can be obtained easily.
What is the relevance of this idea to your prompt? Your prompt talks about keep trying and never stop working.

You are right. Could I make it like this...
Thirdly, we might feel that the duty to achieve our goal is too heavy to carry on. I believe that the duty is worthy of carrying. When the distance is longer and harder to achieve, a runner who can go beyond his limit will proud of himself. He can feel the sweetness of triumph because he did not stop pursing his goal.

I would also love to hear your suggestion and your comment. ^ ^ By the way, thank you for your kind response. ^ ^


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