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What kind of writing have you done at work and in school?



syed199343 1 / -  
Aug 18, 2011   #1
history of your own writing process (and attitude toward writing) as it has evolved over the past few years. What kind of writing have you done at work and in school? What writing classes have you taken and how did they go? What do you see as your strengths and weaknesses as a writer? What hopes and fears do you have for this course?

I believe writing is something you express through words instead of actions. Writing is like a magical way of putting together your thoughts. I have gone through many obstacles in my writing but that has never let me down. I have done many different styles of writing in many different classes. From English one in freshman year to Senior years Modern Literature class, I have made my writing skills go through a metamorphosis. With this change come many strengths but also some weaknesses. Throughout the years, I have evolved my writing style through many good and bad experiences and will continue to do so with more to come.

It was freshman year of high school, I had yet a clue of what was ahead of me. My first year of English was called English one. I clearly remember hating English from the bottom of my heart and could not even stand the class. My teachers name was Mr. G and he seemed like an interesting man but the fact that he was an English teacher made me despise him. After a few weeks into the class we had to write a small essay about what we expect in high school and our goals. I attempted to write it but miserably failed with a thirty-five percent. I thought to myself "oh well", but my teacher told me to stay after class and explained to me how important high school is and how he is giving me a chance to re do the paper for a little bit more credit. At this point of time I was really bad at writing so I took this opportunity because I never got it in middle school. The next day I revised it and returned it to him and he showed me the things that were wrong and what I should correct next time, he passed me with a D. I was not proud at all, all that effort and just a D I had to do something about it. I took the essay and got help from some friends and got it revised. I turned in the essay to him and told him to just read it and that he doesn't have to give me a grade on it. I felt really confident and left the room. The next day he told me to stay after class and I asked him about the essay. He just told me to give him a high five. I got happy and all he does is hands me the paper and says, "Ill put it in the grade book". I looked at the paper got really excited, I had gotten a B. From that point none of my writing had never been the same.

Junior year of high school was a great time. I had learned many new things, from who my true friends are to what I really wanted to do with my life. Then there was my English 3 class which was a big part of my academic achievement. At this point I wasn't really a smart student or a person you might call stupid but I did lack some organization skills. It was time to write the Junior research paper and I had no clue on what to do. I delay it and before I knew it the deadline to turn it in was in a day. We had been writing the essay in class for the past week but I chose to play computer games rather than type It up, which my teacher realized. He called me out into the hall and told me if I have anything ready and my ego answered yes it will be ready by tonight. The next day in class I turn in a typed up one page paper and this was a really big part of our grade. Near the end of the semester I was half a percent short from passing the class. My teacher took me out into the hall way and said if I revise my paper and turn it in I can get a few points. He gave me a talk on how life wont give you chances like this all the time and that I should really step it up in life. He was right, at that point I realized what I had done was way past bad and I sincerely apologized. That point made me realize that I had to over come obstacles not run away from them. This made me realize my strengths and weaknesses and how I should change this. From that point on I had gotten more organized and a better writer as well, but I still have more to learn.

I personally think that my writing has vastly improved from my past experiences. For the future I have many hopes and some fears as well. I look forward to taking classes at COD and taking this English course to increase my knowledge in the world of writing. I hope that I get very good grades and will try my hardest to achieve it. I hope that my fear of failing will not get to me and I look forward to the new experiences that I will go through. My ambition will guide me through this class and to my goals and with your help as my teacher hopefully I succeed. Even though I have made many mistakes throughout my high school career I plan to change that and improve my writing, my attitude towards writing, and learn to grow. These experiences and mistakes have helped me learn and grow a lot from when I was a freshman. These experiences have changed my perception on writing and now is an enjoyable part of English class I look forward to. A boy who entered English one and hated the whole vibe of the class, to a man that can love to write. Hopefully I enjoy this new beginning with college English and I look forward to the experiences I have ahead of me through this class.

beepro21 15 / 22  
Aug 19, 2011   #2
I like your interesting writing .You satisfied most of task requirements with a well-structured essay. The introduction is really good because it heralds what you are going to write next. There is a good connection between different paragraphs which I like most in this writing. However, I think you should pay more attention to the use of punctuation and develop third paragraph further. You should write more about your strengths and weaknesses as a writer.You told about your experiences in which you didn't finish your essay but I think it's likely about your management time skills. I mean that you should write more about your strong and weak points in writing. What is the thing you hasn't satistified about your writing and what are you going to improve your writing in the future?

Hope that my ideas can be useful to you.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Aug 29, 2011   #3
I believe writing is something you express through words instead of actions. Not a good start. It is too obvious!

Writing is like a magical way of putting together your thoughts. -----THIS is a good start!!! I like it!!!!

It was freshman year of high school, I had yet a clue of what was ahead of me. ---This sentence needs a conjunction. How about the word YET after the comma?

My first year of English was called English one.--If it was called this, the word "one" should be capitalized. But I think it was probably called this: English 1

I clearly remember hating English from the bottom of my heart and could not even stand the class. ---Ha ha, another great sentence!!! I sort of wish this was the first sentence of the essay.

Nice job!!

I look forward to taking classes at COD and taking this English course to increase my knowledge in the world of writing. ---This is a great sentence...

I hope that I get very good grades and will try my hardest to achieve it. ---This sentence is unclear. Achieve what? Good grades? If you mean good grades, you should write:

... will try my hardest to achieve them.
I think that way would be okay.

:-)
Lindabrown 2 / 3  
Aug 30, 2011   #4
These experiences have changed my perception on writing and now is an enjoyable part of English class I look forward to.

run-on!! it should be seperated into two sentences. or These experiences have changed my perception on writing, and is now an enjoyable part of english class I look forward to.


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