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Dec 5, 2016   #1
Everyone has already taught from their teacher, That An eye for an eye, and a tooth for a tooth, which means if someone mistreats you and considers you As his enemies, You ought to give him revenge As far as you can, with reference to his action for you.

However, your God has said " do not tried to attempt a revenge to your enemies" in the event that he slaps your cheek, then turn and let him slap your other cheek or someone sues your shirt, give up your coat and let him take it. On the other hand, At all times people said "Love your neighbour and hate your enemies" but your God said "Love your enemies and pray for anyone who mistreats you" then you will be acting such a good man, in the final analysis God will reward for your kindness.

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Dec 5, 2016   #2
Ahmad, do you have a prompt that you are responding to with this statement? I am not sure about how to review the content because I have no idea where your response is coming from and what it should apply to. However, even without knowing the prompt, I know that the essay is riddled with punctuation, grammar, and lexical problems.

For example, you do not have properly placed periods in the essay even though you knew to capitalize the start of the next sentence. So I knew where the next started and the other one ended. Why did you forget to place the period in those areas? The same opinion applies to the way that you did not use punctuation marks when you should have within the essay. There are also coherence problems with the statement such as the reference to someone "sues" a shirt. I am not sure what you meant by sues. Did you mean "uses" and not "sues" ?

Keep in mind that you should review your responses and make sure that the reader will be able to understand what you saying clearly. Otherwise, your explanation or response will fail in its task of informing the reader. Are you doing this exercise or a qualifying test? Please let us know because the advice for you can be adjusted even further in order to help you pass those tests. Otherwise, this basic advice will already deliver some very important reviews and advice for your English writing development.

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