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'I just want to let you know that I moved to a new house' - Letter to a friend - IELTS


trina 1 / 2  
Feb 21, 2015   #1
Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter:

1. explain why you have moved
2. describe the new house
3. Invite your friend to come and visit


Dear Maria,

I hope you are doing well. I just want to let you know that I moved to a new house. I left my old house beacuse I realized it is too far from my workplace.

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aaronmorg - / 2  
Feb 21, 2015   #2
The only thing I found wrong was There are three bedroom . bedrooms
Overall nice job.
aaronmorg - / 2  
Feb 22, 2015   #3
each room has bathroom . each room has a bathroom.
big space for a kitchen
EF_Season - / 21 14  
Feb 24, 2015   #4
Hi Trina! I hope you are doing well. (See how I used your sentence there? :) I'm EF_Season and I will help you with your letter today, okay?

First, I'd like to compliment you on a job well done. This letter is clear and concise. I like to read writing like this because it is simple to understand. I did notice a couple of things that might help you improve, though.

Dear Maria,

I hope you are doing well. I just[The word "just" is a work that takes up space and has a different meaning for every person. Thus, I suggest you cut words like "just," "really," and "very" from all academic writing. Except for the rare occasion, these words are seldom useful.] want to let you know that I moved to a new house. I left my old house beacuse[check spelling] I realized it is too far from my workplace.

My new house is located near Mcdonalds [Do you mean "McDonald's" like the restaurant? If so, notice my spelling here.] at P. Noval St. It is a two-story building and there is a big garden at the front. I like the choice of color [If you've purchased the house (or are renting) do you have a "choice" of color? Do you simply mean that you like the color?] which is pink with blue lining [What is "lining?" Do you me an "trim?"] . There are windows, actually big windows in every corner of the house so we really have a good ventilation. There are three bedrooms on the second floor and each room has bathroom [Do you mean that each bedroom has an attached bathroom? Wow! As written, it sounds like every room in the house (i.e. kitchen, etc...) has it's own bathroom. Clarify for your reader.]. What I like the most on the first floor is how the architect allocated a big space for kitchen. I really like it since I love cooking!

I would like to invite you, to visit me in my new house. By the way, I will be organizing a house blessing probably next week. I'll send you an invitation once I [have] finalized it. I hope you can come.

Yours,

Leah


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