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KPU urges govt to speed up e-KTP for Feb. elections



Yusuf05 11 / 14  
Aug 23, 2016   #1
Your feedback is very welcome.

As a form of revitalisation in electoral system, the General Elections Commission (KPU), has advised the authority to accelerate the substitution of regular identity card of about 41.8 million Indonesian into electronic identity card (e-KTP) by the next February. Despite the instruction to use e-KTP for voting, however, there are approximately 5 million voters remaining in printed ID modes.

Individuals who are not meet the requirement -whether to hold an e-KTP or residence certificate in election- will automatically loss their right to vote. Furthermore, Hadar Nafis Gumay stated that it is the duty of the government to arrange a well-structured procedure for each citizen in order to prod the easiness in turning over the ID.

In fact, some troubles may still be encountered by Indonesians in getting e-KTPs. The Indonesian Consumer Foundation in the previous month argued that several reports had received regarding to inadequacy of an e-KTP blank forms. As a result, an accumulation in the system took the operation two to three months longer than expected. However, the idea of obliging e-KTP in elections projected to be implemented in 2019.

Iforsa 35 / 52  
Aug 23, 2016   #2
you make a well-organized essay, i love to read it. here a few comment from me
... e-KTP for voting, however, there are approximately 5 million voters ... we cannot use 'however' to join sentences. we use 'however' at the beginning of a sentence to say something different from the sentence before.

thank you
hailun11 12 / 12  
Aug 28, 2016   #3
Hello Yusuf05
These are my corrections

Despite the instruction to use e-KTP for voting, however, there are approximately 5 million voters remaining in printed ID modes.which was about 5 million voters... (Using conjunction 'however' should describe about opposite in the previous sentence. And also, the rule for using this conjunction is at the beginning of early sentence then put comma on it).

Individuals who are not meetdid not fulfill the requirement -whether to hold ...
Furthermore, Hadar Nafis Gumay statedsaid that " it is the duty of the government (...) the easiness in turning over the ID" .

... e-KTP in elections projected towould be implemented in 2019. (This situation is (maybe) still would happen in the future).

Please pay attention for using tenses because it would influence for readers how to try understanding your report anyway.

Keep writing!
Cheers^^


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