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Lawbreakers, who haven't committed serious crimes, ought to be assigned non remuneration social work



mathew123 2 / 2  
Sep 22, 2019   #1
Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars.
To what extend do you agree ?


giving the second chance



Some sociologists opine that few lawbreakers, who have not committed serious crimes, ought to be assigned non remuneration social works while other people argue that it would be negative impact on social system, as there might be increase in the rate of crimes in communities. This essay agrees with the former view, since it may provide second chance for law offenders to start new life and benefits societies in many ways.

Probably, lawbreakers may engage in social benefit activities, which tend to change their life in future. These wrongdoers can be assigned for helping downtrodden and disable people, as this may generate empathy and compassion and realize selfishness of their activity. One of the good examples can be cited in China, where young law offenders cook and serve to blind schools and old age homes. Overall motive is to provide a new opportunity to these criminals by teaching them new skills and changing narrative towards their life.

Admittedly, these types of the activity benefits communities in numerous ways. It is commonly seen in many developed countries that less serious crimes, such as, traffic violations are penalized with social works like cleaning of streets and planting new trees. There will be fewer crimes and fewer burdens on law administration in future if other governments promote such type of approach towards law offenders in developing countries too.

To conclude, in my opinion giving wrongdoers the second chance is not only good for society but provide new opportunity to criminals to start a new life. Although, some consider all criminals should be put behind bars for their crimes, in my view it is not good for social system and sustainable development in society.

Maria - / 1096  
Sep 24, 2019   #2
@mathew123
Hey!

I hope that the feedback you receive here becomes beneficial for your learning and grasping of English. If you have more questions, don't hesitate to reach out to us once more.

First and foremost, I suggest minimizing the number of interlinked sentences and/or phrases to cultivate a smoother sentence. This is essential, especially if we would review the first paragraph that you currently have. Remember that the goal is to relay the message rather than battle with any complexity that may accompany the writing.

Furthermore, be cautious of small mistakes in the grammatical composition. This can be reflected not only with larger composition mistakes but also with your usage of tenses. Review your second paragraph for this reason.

The last two paragraphs of the essay are well-composed. I would only suggest that your language needs to focus more on being critical rather than being oblivious to writing.

Best of luck.


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