Schools are no longer necessary, because children can get so much information available through internet, and they can study just as well at home. What extent do you agree or disagree?
One's success determines on how people are studying. For this reason, it is estimated that there are no available schools in many areas owing to the fact that the majority of children rely entirely on computers which provides them to study at their own places. While this phenomenon meets several merits and demerits, I am personally convinced that some learners need a structured course from high qualified teacher to know materials in a depth.
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One's success(Success in what?) determines on how(what do you mean by how?.) people are studying. For this reason(this sentence and the opening one are not really connected. For what reason and what is the relationship between a person's success and what some people estimate.) , it is estimated that there arewould be no available schools in many areas owing to the fact that the majority of children rely entirely on computers nowadays which provides them with an opportunity to study at their own places and become independent on traditional teacher-centered classrooms . While this phenomenon meets several merits and demerits (this is an agree or disagree topic and do not need to talk about advantages and disadvantages of both education systems. Take one side, either agree or disagree, and support your opinion through at least two body paragraphs) , I am personally convinced that some learners need a structured course from high qualified teacher to know materials in a depth.
The available technology as a powerful tool to engage students may dismiss the existence of school. The advancement in technologyTechnological advanced renders the various teaching methodologies . As an obvious example (I would say "a clear-cut example") , some American students prefer to study by using "online video teaching". This method refers to students who study with their teachers by video online for several hours. As a consequence, a novel teaching methodology tends to create an informal learning process.
Conversely, schools are still necessary for learning process. By and large, almost all countries in this world(you don't need to say in this world as there is no country in any other world. Avoid any kind of redundancy) have a number of people with illiteracy problem due to accessing computer frequently which impacts to poor hand writing (you cannot call this issue "illiteracy". It is an educational issue but illiteracy is different) . Children need to study at school in order to enable them to write a letter by hand properly. As a result, it is unavoidable that children need to be secured at school (this idea is not strong. I mean you can point out much more important issues, cause the main goal of schools is not to improve students' hand writings. Try to make the body paragraphs tangible and reasonable) .
Personally speaking, the majority of students need to acquire and understand some materials clearly by meeting their teachers (suggestion: Schools provide students with the privilege of one-on-one communication) . To exemplify, children learn about numeration may find difficult to understand without a direct explanation by teachers. Hence, schools play a prominent role forinchildren's education.
In conclusion, teaching methodology is expected to be broad as the development of technology, and it will affect to the existence of teaching learning process formally(I think you need to revise this sentence, it is a bit confusing.) . What should education stakeholders react forto this phenomenon is to incline the quality of teachers at schools to create the expert one, and then provide interesting and novel materials so as to not boring-to-outdated subjects (do not write about new ideas in the conclusion. Just stick to the idea you provide in the body. First reword the thesis statement, then write a clincher)
Hope this helps,
Cheers,
Ahmad
