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SAT: Learning from mistakes or from our successful actions?



Itsyasmeens 2 / 9  
Apr 27, 2014   #1
Assignment:
Do we learn more from finding out that we have made mistakes or from our successful actions?
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Making mistakes is in the human nature, as long as we are still breathing then we will still make mistakes. It's impossible for anyone to be perfect without one flaw or mistake. However, repeating the same mistake over and over again is considered carelessness. We make mistakes to learn from them, because there's no success without failure. If our life is all going in the same successful track without any miss then we'd be nothing and we'd be uncreative and weak because failing makes us stronger as in the famous quote "what doesn't kill you makes you stronger". [..]

JangGemini 8 / 49  
Apr 27, 2014   #2
Making mistakes is in the human nature, as long as we are still breathing then we will still make mistakes. It's impossible for anyone to be perfect without one flaw or mistake. However, repeating the same mistake over and over again is considered carelessness(not necessarily be mentioned. It makes your point confusing and vague since the question asks if we LEARN from MISTAKES, not REPEATED mistakes) . We make mistakes to learn from them, because there's no success without failure. If our life is all going in the same successful track without any miss then we'd be nothing and we'd be uncreative and weak because failing makes us stronger as in the famous quote "what doesn't kill you makes you stronger".=> this sentence is rambling. A better way is to clearly state your opinion here. For example: I strongly believe failure teaches us more valuable lessons than success does. As somebody said "Failure is not a by-product of success but success is the by-product of failure."

Many successful and influenciveinfluential people in the history have failed before succeeding like Thomas Edison. Thomas Edison have failed a thousand times before being able to creat the light bulb.When he was asked how didhe felt to fail 700 times, he said that these weren't failures but making the light bulb had a thousand steps because he learned from each failure which resulted in making the light bulb and he said "failure is the opportunity to start again more intellegently"."I have not failed 700 times. I have not failed once. I have succeeded in proving that those 700 ways will not work. When I have eliminated the ways that will not work, I will find the way that will work." (it's okay if you don't remember the exact quote but try to rewrite the idea in a concise and intelligible way. And actually now you know the exact quote and you can use it next time, right? I honestly just copied it but I want you to know the quote and use it in the future :) )

Louis Braille kept trying to find appropriate symbols for the braille language for five years failing one day and achieving the other day. However, after that he was able to successfully to make the braille language. You need to provide more details about this example and explain it more concretely to demonstrate how it relates to your point.

At last, if we only keep succeeding without failing we will never learn, and our successful actions never teach us but they give us hope instead so we can never make something without failing a little and succeeding a little as well.

=> The truth is without failure, we can never succeed. It's not that "we keep succeeding" that we do not learn (because if we succeed then we must have learnt something. You know what I mean?) For conclusion, you should restate your opinion with a short summary of your mentioned examples. It's better to have more than 1 sentence in the conclusion. :)

Don't freak out with my correction in your essay. I'm studying for SAT right now so I understand how hard it is to write an essay in a short period of time. I just hope that you will learn more from this experience to prepare for your future essays. I'm sorry that I'm not qualified enough to grade your essay but I'm sure your teacher is. Good luck! Work hard! :)
niesaysi 16 / 281  
Apr 27, 2014   #3
At last, if we only keep succeeding without failing we will never learn..

Rephrase this. There is no mistake here grammatically.
Lastly, learning takes place through failures which guide us towards success.

Many successful andinfluenciveinfluential people in the history have failed first before succeeding like Thomas Edison. Thomas Edison have failed a thousand times before he successfully inventedbeing able to creat the light bulb.( another sentence)W hen he was asked how did he failed a thousand times , he said that these weren'twere not failures butbecause making the light bulb had a thousand steps (Stop here) . B ecause he learned from each failure which resulted in making the light bulb,and he said "failure is the opportunity to start again more intellegently".

Good luck:)
OP Itsyasmeens 2 / 9  
Apr 28, 2014   #4
Thank you guys so much! I will sure do all the things you said next time :)
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Apr 28, 2014   #5
If our life is all going in the same successful track without any miss then we'd be nothing and we'd be uncreative and weak because failing makes us stronger as in the famous quote "what doesn't kill you makes you stronger".

If you could, then break this long sentence. The readers are tired of memorizing so many facts you have written there.

never teach us (a comma) but they
dumi 1 / 6793  
May 14, 2014   #6
Making mistakes is in the human nature, as long as we are still breathing then we will still make mistakes. It's impossible for anyone to be perfect without one flaw or mistake.

.... I think you elaborate the same idea a bit too much here. This is what I suggest;
Making mistakes is an integral part of human nature and it is almost impossible to find a person who has not done any mistake in life.

Well, I think you need more flesh in your body paras :) Your second body para is too short :(


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