Learning and working from home, positive or negative development?

Topic:
Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Answer:
Thanks to the advancement of technology, distant working and learning have been made possible for both workers and students. I think that this practice has brought about ample benefits to the society, yet other downsides of it should also be taken into consideration.

Firstly, working and learning from home do wonders for the environment. It has been statistically reported that the daily commute to work and school of citizens is the one of the main contributory factors to the increase in carbon emissions. By practicing distant learning and working, people can reduce the number of journeys they make every day, hence decreasing the amount of carbon footprint emitted from motorised vehicles. Besides, the lowered demand for fuels used to run transportation would also gradually put a halt to the overexploitation of fossil fuels, another environmental issue.

On the other hand, staying at home to learn and work continuously may have some certain adverse effect on people. Distant learning means that children will not have a chance to meet their peers face-to-face and have real interactions, which may negatively affect their communicative and social skills. More specifically, when students just study online, they would not have opportunities to encounter different social situations in which they have to deal with in real life, such as having a conflict with friends when playing. Moreover, learning and working from home discourage people from being physically active as they hardly have to move from place to place. This may result in a sedentary lifestyle and hence, other diseases such as obesity.

To conclude, distant learning and working may have significant impacts on the improvement of the environment. However, it may create some mental and physical issues to people who experience it for a long time.

Hi, I think you weighed the issues well but there are some grammatical errors: 1- distance not distant learning. 2- discourages not discourage, i think you meant to say. there are also several unnecessary prepositional phrases, such as when you added "another environmental issue". while not incorrect, it makes your writing come off overly wordy.

The format for your response should be a single opinion approach. You are asked if this is a positive or negative development. You were not asked to discuss the positive and negative development of this point of view. There is a difference between the two. The first one, the original presentation, seeks your opinion based on 2 related reasons for one opinion. You have to pick either a positive or negative discussion, not both. The other format, is a comparative discussion, which, if the essay allowed, would have asked you to discuss both points of view. You clearly did not understand the discussion instructions since you opted to do a comparative discussion in a single opinion presentation. Your final score will reflect this error based on an unrelated response consideration.

@Holt
Thank you so much for your feedback!!! I didn't realize this problem until you comment. It helps a lot, I'll pay attention to this matter next time :p