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The line graph illustrates the consumption of spreads, in grams, over the course of 26 years



Huysero11 2 / -  
Jul 7, 2022   #1

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The given line graph depicts the consumption of spreads, in grams, over the course of 26 years, starting from 1981.

Overall, the quantity of butter and margarine suffered significant decreases throughout the period while the amount of low fat and reduced spreads consumed experienced an upward trend. Another interesting point here is that before 1996, people just put margarine or butter in their bread.

Looking at the graph in more detail, it can be seen that in 1981, the amount of margarine and butter consumed were around 90 grams and up to 140 grams, respectively. There was a growth in butter consumption. It rose to approximately 160 grams in 1986 before plugging to about 70 grams a decade later. The quantity then continued to decline and reached the low-point at around 50 grams at the end of the period. In the meantime, the 1981-1991 period witnessed a fluctuation in the amount of margarine consumed. The consumption remained stable at 100 grams until 1996 before falling drastically to 40 grams in 2007, becoming the least popular type of spreads in this year.

People started using low fat and reduced spreads in 1996, at around 10 grams. The consumption of this kind of spreads underwent a rapid surge to more than 80 grams in 2001 (as popular as margarine in this year). Then it declined to around 70 grams in 2007, taking the first place in consumption compared to the two other kinds of spreads.

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Jul 7, 2022   #2
The presentation is overwritten. Timed writing will show that 243 words cannot be completed within 20 minutes The writer turned the writing into a vocabulary exercise. Most of the writing lost objectivity because the writer included personal opinions and assumptions. These are 2 reflections that should never be found in a task 1 essay since it is an analytical report based on pre-supplied data.

A task 1 essay has a different set of writing requirements from a task 2 essay. The biggest difference? A task 1 essay should only be between 150-200 words. That is the achievable number for the 20 minute time allowance. The essay should be less wordy next time. Keep it short and factual.


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