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IELTS Writing Task 1 (Line graph) - The money spent by British parents on their children's sport



uyen_465 1 / -  
Jan 16, 2024   #1
The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sport between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

The line graphs demonstrate the average monthly money that British parents spent on children's sporting activities and the number of children taking part in three different sports from 2008 to 2014.

Overall, the amount of money spent by British parents increased gradually over the six-year period. Additionally, the number of children playing football was highest among the three given sports.

In 2008, British parents spent 20 pounds on their children's sports. The amount money spent increased gradually and rose to more than 30 pounds in 2014. At the same time, the figure for children's participation in football was around 8 million, while there was only around 2 and 1 million children who participated in swimming and athletics, respectively.

Looking at the graph for more details, the number of children taking part in athletics and swimming increased gradually to an identical point of 2.5 million children in 2011. In 2012, the figure for children's participation in athletics reached its peak at 5 million children and then dropped slightly to just under 5 million children in 2014. The number of children who took part in football and swimming rose steadily to around 9 and 3.5 million children in 2014.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15411  
Jan 20, 2024   #2
The line graphs

A chart is different from a line graph. The original prompt uses the term "chart" to describe the 2 measurements provided. That means you should have referred to it in the restatement either as a tabular chart, pie chart, or columnar chart. The wrong reference will force the examiner to reduce your TA and C+C score. You also forgot to reference what sports are being measured and the number of children participants for each chart. The summary overview is incomplete.

British parents spent 20 pounds

Is this a monthly or yearly expense? The charts would have been quite clear about those reference points.

You have made an effort to present the information as clearly as possible. However, your confusing reference points and missing information make the report a bit problematic to understand.


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