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Task 1: Line graph: the number of public transit passengers from 1989 to 2009 ..



Ann17 2 / 4  
Jul 8, 2023   #1

the number of public transit passengers - graph analysis



The graphs below show the number of public transit passengers from 1989 to 2009 and bus and tram passenger numbers between 2000 and 2008 in Melbourne.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Aswer
The first line graph gives the information on using public transportation from 1989 to 2009, and the second line graph provides the passenger data for buses and trams between 2000 and 2008 in Melbourne.

In common, there was an upward trend of the ridership number of public transit from 1989 to 2009. More specifically, even though bus and tram passengers both increased from 2000 to 2008, there was a growth in bus riders.

According to the first graph, the number of ridership of transportation increased slightly in 1994, nearly 300 million. After 1994, for the data of ridership of transportation, it grew significantly, about 350 million passengers in 2004, when it started to surge dramatically in 2009, about 500 million.

In the second graph, the total number of bus uses was unchanged from 2000 to 2002, but between 2022 and 2008, it reached a high by around 100 million. Moreover, in 2004, the amount of using bus was passed away the number of using tram. As for tram uses, from 2000 and 2002, it was still higher than bus uses, about 20 million although it remained. After that, it increased slowly in 2004, about 160 million but it declined slightly in two years after. Then, at the end of the year 2006, it surged, reaching approximately about 200 million in 2008. However, the amount of tram use was fewer than the amount of bus use.

Note: If you can, please give me a mark for this essay.
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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15460  
Jul 10, 2023   #2
The essay is over written. You might not be able to complete such an intricate presentation during the actual test. This is 236 words, which is almost a full task 2 essay. The task 1 essay only needs 150-200 words. The most ideal being 175 words, for scoring consideration. It would be unfair of me to judge your writing skills based on an incorrect response format. Your work will be prone to errors that may not exist when you write a short essay. So I will not score this essay but, I can tell you that you will not complete this sort of writing within 20 minutes. You are also, risking not being able to complete writing the task 2 250 word essay because you have to self time yourself when writing the tasks.
OP Ann17 2 / 4  
Jul 10, 2023   #3
Thanks for your advices. I will note it.


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