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IELTS task 1: Line graphs of car theft in 4 different countries

SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Sep 23, 2014   #1
The line graphs compare the number of car theft per a 1000 vehicles in a four-country from 1990 to 1998.

Overall, United Kingdom is far outweigh France, Canada and Sweden in the cases of car robbery over the nine years under review. UK and France depict a slight fluctuation of the car stolen case while Canada's care robberies decreasing in numbers as the opposite of the increasing cases in Sweden.

As per the line charts, UK recorded the car theft at 18 cases per a thousand vehicles in 1990, and it was higher alongside a third number of case happening in Sweden. Furthermore, UK experienced a slight fluctuation to reach its peak at 20 cars stolen in 1996 prior to predict a decrease at 18 cases from 1998 onward. Similarly, those cases in France also fluctuated in numbers. Coming 9 cases recorded in 1990, the cases decrease to account 8 cases in 1998, an identical number with the case showed in 1995.

However, Sweden suffered by the increasing cases of car theft over other three countries. It began with the lowest at 6 cases then underwent a steep incline by 12 cases from 1996 to 1997. Standing in contrast, Canada had 7 cases of car stolen in 1990 then within three years, the cases decrease to around 6 cases per 1000 theft vehicles.

Abdurasul 32 / 86 4  
Oct 22, 2014   #2

Woah, your writing is great! You have followed proper structure!

Just one question:

"A four-country " - does such kind of word exist?

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