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Want to Lose Weight? Try Counting Calories


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Aug 12, 2016   #1
A number of calories that we eat is important, over than one billion adults are obesity. The World Health Organization said that overweight is a global epidemic. Government reported that amount of obesity has not rose in recent years, but the worse is they have not go down either.

People still argue about diet plans to losing their weight, Dr. George Bray at the Pennington Biomedical Research Center in Louisiana wanted to know if protein in food affect weight gain. From educational perspective those who ate a high level of protein gained slimmer body mass. His study on protein, calories, and weight gain appeared in the Journal of the American Medical Association.

Dr. Dariush Mozaffarian at the Harvard School of Public Health studies the relation on diet and condition like heart disease and diabetes. Maintain a healthy weight is about what kind of food and how much the calories you eat. Increasing amount of fruits, vegetables, whole grains, fish, vegetable oils, and nuts.

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akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 12, 2016   #2
Hi Sestria..
I am delighted to read your writing. However, I think you need improving.
I hope you can follow my instruction the next writing.


A number of calories that we eat eaten is important, over than one billion adults are obesity(This sentence is not coherent. Be careful to create a sentence) . The World Health Organization said STATED that overweight is a global epidemic. Government RESEARCHERS (YOU CANNOT ALTER MEANING OF THE ARTICLE) reported that amount of obesity has not rose RISEN (PAST PERFECT) in recent years, but the worse FACTOR is THAT they have not go WENTdown either.

People still HAVE argueD about diet plans to losing LOSE their weight.
... in Louisiana wanted to know if THE protein in food affectS weight gain. MaintainING a healthy weight is about ...
Increasing THE amount of fruits, vegetables, ...

NOTE:
Make sure that you use verb agreement appropriately.
You should read your writing again before you upload since you sometimes lose meaning of the article..

Practice more and more..
Happy Writing


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