I would greatly appreciate any help on improving my short answer essay under the extracurricular activities section. Here it is:
'Lose your concentration, lose the game'. The simplicity of this phrase belies its ease-of-applicability to every aspect of our lives. Through golf, I have come to realise that the glory of winning does not emanate from a stadium of raucous chants or applause, nor does it come from the comforting weight of a medal around one's neck. The sheer technicality and precision required in every shot makes this a sport where discipline of the mind is of the highest priority; and it is often said that an unwavering consistency, coupled with a sound head in the face of adversity, is necessarily essential for victory. Being captain in my senior year has immensely enhanced my abilities as an effective leader, and the experience has also taught me important life lessons in handling situations with honor, grace and virtue. Without question, golf has played a substantial role in developing my character and intellectual ability.