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The main concept of ecotourism are make good environment and get income without injuring it


BAMS14 18 / 29  
Aug 25, 2016   #1
The ecotourism is new concept to exploit environtmen source. Ecotourism is one of many concept to campaign green movement, perserve local ecology and local culture. In addition get income also perserve environtment avoid harming environtment and make a positive contribution. There is some example ecotourism, such us ecotourism national park, traditional rafting, natural environtment etc. Ecotourism seek out accomodation that follow environtment tally friendly practices such us renewable resources and recycling. The main concept of ecotourism are make good environtment and get income without injuring environtmen.
path83 2 / 2  
Aug 25, 2016   #2
nice to meet you Mr. Bams,

I think you the passage need to polish in grammatically. and also you need be carefull in your article.

Thank you
angga93 42 / 74 20  
Aug 25, 2016   #3
The ecotourism is a new concept to exploit environtmensource. [i suggest to replace the words in italic with "natural resources" ]

Ecotourism[i suggest to use subject pronoun (it) to avoid word repetition] is one of many concepts to campaign green movement, perserve local ecology and local culture.

>>>> ... preserve local ecology and local culture. : [when you use "and", make sure all components are in balance]

In addition, get income also perserve environtment avoid harming environtment and make a positive contribution.
>>> my suggestion: Besides earning additional income, this type of tourism is potential to make a positive contribution to the environment by avoiding harmful activity

There is some example ecotourism, such usas ecotourism national park, traditional rafting, natural environtment etc.
>>> This sentence doesn't belong here. You should put it just after the definition of ecotourism

... accomodation that followsenvirontment tallyenvironmentally friendly practices such ususing renewable resources and utilizing recycling methods .

The main concept of ecotourism are make good environtment[replacement: protecting the environment] and get income [replacement: rising avenue] without injuring environtmen .
>>> I assume that this is your conclusion, so you should use signalling phrase in the beginning of this sentence.

spelling:
environtment --> environment
perserve --> preserve
such us --> such as
Aris05 31 / 24 1  
Aug 25, 2016   #4
Hii bams. I just wanna share my thought.

The ecotourism is new a concept to exploit environtment source

Ecotourism is one of many concepts to campaign green movement and perserve local ecology

There is are some example of ecotourism, such usas

The main concept of ecotourism are make good ...
The main concept of ecotourism ismaking good environtment and getting income without injuring environtment

That's it.I hope it can be useful for you.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Aug 26, 2016   #5
Hi Bams, first of all WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you find this website to be helpful and even more so useful to your writing projects. We aim at providing you the most accurate and comprehensive feedback and assure you of the best results possible.

Having said that, please find the corrections below;

- The ecotourism is a new concept
- to exploit environtmenour natural resourcessource .
- Ecotourism is one of many concepts to campaign green movement,
-In addition, ( don't forget your punctuation marks ) get income we
- also preserve the environment - "environment" is a without a "t" )
- There is some example ecotourism, such usSuch example of ecotourism
- are national parks ,
- environtment tally- environmentally friendly
- The main concept of ecotourism are make good environtment and get income without injuring environtmen.is to create a good a sustainable environment and preserve our natural resources.

There you have it Bams, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision.


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