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The main problems associated with phenomenon of common Internet usage



Minh Yen 1 / -  
Jun 13, 2015   #1
False information and hackers are the main problems associated with the wide spread of the use of the Internet. False information can exist in the advertisements, unqualified newspaper and websites. It often cause confusion and misconception among the wed users. Some people can made up false information to advertise themselves or defame their adversaries. Meanwhile, the hackers can make use of the weaknesses of Internet security systems to steal change or erase important imformation. Some high-skilled hackers can break down the function of many important websites and cause destructive effects.

Fortunately, the governments and web administrators are making great efforts to minimize the damages caused by the false information and hackers. But those efforts could be wasted if the web users don't know how to protect themselves. Don't turn your accounts into valuable, vulnerable targets. Install web security programs and don't publish your private informations on the websites unless you have to. Above all, do not trust anything on the Internet.

lightfox 3 / 27  
Jun 13, 2015   #2
Overall, not a bad essay in terms of content. My main problem with your essay was that you made your sentences choppy--you explained things in two or three sentences that could easily be explained in just one sentence, and I fixed those problems and I hope you take note of that. I also rearranged the location of some phrases because I believe that places that I moved them to would make your essay flow much better. Hope you take note of these revisions and fix your essay accordingly .
aseprudi 20 / 19  
Jun 13, 2015   #3
Hallo Minh,
I would render you some suggestion for this essay:

False information..

Inaccurate information and hackers are the major problems associated for the wide range of the Internet connection. Erroneous information could be available particularly on the advertisement, newspaper and website. It frequently causes various confusion and misconception surrounding users.

Thank you


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