Unanswered [6] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width   Posts: 2


The main reason worldwide for agricultural land becoming less productive is over-grazing; IELTS



coriandrum 1 / -  
Sep 16, 2014   #1
[Thanks in advance for the feedback, it'd be greatly appreciated.]

The pie chart reports main causes of worldwide agricultural land degradation and a table showing main reasons by regions in 1990s.

The main reason worldwide for agricultural land becoming less productive is over-grazing with 35 %, followed by 30 % for deforestation. Third top cause is over cultivation with 28 %.

The most percent of degraded land is in Europe, where 9.8p of land is degraded by deforestation and 7.7 % by over-cultivation. Both of these numbers being the highest of the three regions. Oceania reports a total of 13 % degraded land. It's leading cause is over-grazing with 11.3 % in the region and also the highest value in all regions mentioned. North American region reports only five percent of land degraded in 1990s. Over-cultivation causes degradation of 3.3 % of agricultural land in North America, compared to 0p in Oceania. 1.5 % of land is devalued by over-grazing, which is the lowest value in the cause. Combined, over-grazing degrades most of the land in the three regions, which agrees with the worldwide numbers.


  • Screen_Shot_201409.png


fikri 5 / 310  
Sep 16, 2014   #2
The pie chart reports main causes of worldwide agricultural land degradation and while the table shows main reasons by regions in 1990s.

also, you need a conclusion which shows the correlation between the first and the second picture


Home / Writing Feedback / The main reason worldwide for agricultural land becoming less productive is over-grazing; IELTS
Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳

Academic AI Writer:
Custom AI Writer ◳