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Ielts Task 1: Main reasons for migration to and from the UK


MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Jun 28, 2013   #1
The given pie charts present data concerning the main incentives why people migrated to and from the UK in 2007. Overall, the majority of emigrants and immigrants cited employment as their chief culprit for migration.

Nearly a thirth of the total people migrated to the UK with a view to having a definite job, which was approximately equal to the corresponding figure for UK emigrants. Meanwhile, another career-related reason, looking for work, accounted for 12% of immigration, around half its proportion of emigration.

Additionally, formal study was the second major factor contributing to UK immigration with over a quarter of people. On the contrary, this reason merely took up an average of 4% of citizens leaving the UK. Accompanying or joining a family was responsible for similar statistics for both immigration and emigration, at 15% and 13% respectively. Simultaneously, only 6% of people gave no specific reasons why they immigrated, compared to a significantly higher proportion of those emigrated at roughly a fifth. Furthermore, the remaining people of each group induced other objectives regarding their moving.




dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jun 28, 2013   #2
The given pie charts present data concerning the mai and incentives why people migrated to and from the UK in 2007.

...good

Overall, the majority of emigrants and immigrants cited employment as their chief culprit for migration.

....culprit?....this word is used to describe a person who is guilty of a crime. So, I strongly feel it is inappropriate to use this word for your idea. Simply say ;

Overall, the majority of emigrants and immigrants cited employment as their main reason for migration.
OP MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Jun 29, 2013   #3
culprit

Thanks for your correction! I misused the word in this sentence


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