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Make a point about a special keepsake you have reminding you of a significant person



hellokittyque 1 / -  
Oct 8, 2011   #1
The necklace my grandmother gave me is important because she gave to me be for she died. When I was nine I want to my grandmother house in Queen, NY. I when up stand to her bedroom. Where she was lay down on her bed. I sat right next to her where she stared to cry. She was very sick. Next think I know she hand me a necklace say that her mother gave to her on her wedding day. The next day I find out that she had died in her sleep. Know that she gave me this necklace the day before she died .Mean a lot to me because I got to see her one last time to say I love you. That why I would all was Keep the necklace close to my heart because I know she all was with me.

EF_Susan - / 2310  
Oct 10, 2011   #2
The necklace my grandmother gave me is important because she gave to me before she died.

When I was nine, I went to my grandmother's house in Queens , NY.

I went upstairs to her bedroom where she was lying down on her bed.

I sat right next to her and she started to cry.

Next thing I know, she handed me a necklace said that her mother gave to her on her wedding day.

The next day I found out that she had died in her sleep.

She gave me this necklace the day before she died.

It means a lot to me because I got to see her one last time to say I love you.

That's why I will always keep the necklace close to my heart because I know she is always with me.

This is beautiful! Good luck in school and have fun!

:)


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