TOEFL; 'A man 's manner is a mirror that reflects his virtues' - people to be polite to others

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: In a busy and crowded world, we should not expect people to be polite to others.

Once a celebrity said: A man 's manner is a mirror that reflects his virtues. Recently, the social enviornment we lived with busy noises and crowded spaces in case that people pay less attentions on their behaviors and manners. They are being rude towards others.Due to this phenomenon, someone suggests that we should not expect people to be polite to other. Obviously, I do not agree with such kind of altitudes , the explanations I explored would be stated as following.

First of all, a person with good manner will give others a fine personal impression. Through those impressions , a person was easily to get acquired with others and blended with the community that surrounded him as soon as possible. For example, I worked in a new company, if I am a guy with good manners and treating everyone well, my new collegues will accept me ,even then I will be approved by the employers. In opposite situation if I am being rude, I can not get along well with each other.Finally , I will be fired and have no other choice but lost my job .

Secondly,people will get respect from politeness within each other.Politeness and tender words not only can help the speaker to earn a good reputation but also that encourage the listeners who were in need.A successful corporation must have a relationship with respect and pleasure.There are many more facts have improved that people with politeness are easily to be succeed,because from their behaviors ,they made their partners or opponents to find their own individual dignity.

Finally,the society needs a civilized environment and orders.And a degree of social civilization depend on its people 's qualities.In order to creat a better living environment for ourselves and our offsprings,our behaviors must be asked with politeness and good manners.Benefit from those effective measures , there may be an obvious effect on the reducing of criminal rate.

All in all , I suppose that people should be polite to others in a such busy and crowded world.

Thanks for all of you who give me advices and instructions! Sincerely littlekid986

....It's better if you can name this celebrity.... Then it gives a better punch, anyway good start!


This does not flow well... It's a simple idea and it's nicer if you present with more clarity.


acquire means that obtaining possession of something/ acquaint means you make connections with something or someone.


.... this example is good because it is specific :)

thank you so much dumi . well , I am sorry for reply you so late .I leave a while and during this time I do many reading practises. Now I use the method you told me for 4 para article. And I think something is better than before. By the way ,I wrote a new article and used this structure as you told .Can you give me some advices when you have times ?Thank you so much.

although I seem to understand what you want to say here, it still seems a little unclear.
Today, the social environment we live in has become so busy, people have been forced to pay less attention on their manners and behavior.


Again, very confusing. :(
through these impressions, a person will easily blend in with society, and others will star to like him very quickly.
This is what i think you are trying to say..


I think it's better to simply use "children" instead of "offspring"... Oh and there is no such word called offsprings.

In order to create a better living environment for ourselves and our children,we should be good in nature and polite as possible.
But this is one of your better sentences in this essay so i did not change it much.