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'man is a social animal' - Toefl spend your time alone of with friends?



sami talib 2 / 3  
Nov 23, 2011   #1
Toefl Do you prefer to spend your time alone of with friends? Use specific reason to support your answer.

In a day a person has to spend most of his time with others while attending the school, doing a job or at a house with family. When it comes to spending your spare time, then, you have a choice. Being with my friends makes me happy, I forget about my problems and they have positive effect on my personality so I prefer to spend my time with my friends.

People say that man is a social animal, and I am in complete accord with that. I can't stand with sitting in a room, or watch some movie alone. If I do so I get bored. However, with my friends I laugh a lot even at simple gags. After rigorous work of whole week, I want to go for outing on weekend and in order to cherish the holiday I need my friends who make even a simple journey a memorable tour.

Most people have to face hardships and dilemmas in their lives. During such situations, when you are already coping up with your woes and regrets alone, you really need some friend to conciliate our pain. Only a friend, with whom I shared moments of respite, can put him in my shoes and can console me.

Living with friends makes you hospitable and you learn how you can be nice when you meet another person. You can get along with others, despite your differences. You like to live with people and if it happens to go to an unfamiliar place, you can easily make friends who can act as medicine for homesickness.

Some people might like living alone. I, however, find peace and happiness in company of my friends. They take my mind off the stresses, cheer me up and always there whenever I need them.

sjessicaa 1 / 5  
Nov 23, 2011   #2
It is probably a good idea not to address the reader, using "you", in your essay.

"conciliate our pain" is it suppose to be your?

Other than rephrasing the you, its a good essay!
OP sami talib 2 / 3  
Nov 24, 2011   #3
thanks for the reply

can i replace you with me or write in a general way?? for example
Living with friends makes me hospitable and i learn how i can be nice when i meet another person..


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