changes observed in the period of three years
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The maps illustrate how the road leading to the city hospital changed after a 3-year period from 2007 to 2010.
Overall, it can be observed from the maps that after only 3 years, the city hospital became more approachable than it was in the past since more facilitators including a bus station, two roundabouts and separate car parks were placed there. The Ring Road circling the hospital was the only infrastructure that remained unchanged over the investigated period.
In 2007, citizens who commuted to the hospital by public means of transport could use six different bus stops standing along the Hospital Road which led straight to the hospital. Meanwhile, people travelling by private vehicles could make use of the car park on the East side of the Hospital Road.
After 3 years, two roundabouts were constructed to connect the City Road, the Hospital Road and the Ring Road. The old bus stops were relocated to the West side of the Hospital Road and can be accessed via both roundabouts. In addition, instead of parking at a same site with other citizens, hospital laborers had their own parking lot, which took place on the right side of the Ring Road and right next to the hospital, while others still took advantage of the old one.
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