The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

The given maps depict the layout of a bookstore as it was in the year 2000 with a proposed site design for the present day.

Overall, it is clear that the bookstore developed substantially over the period. Specifically, new seating and coffee shop area have been constructed in the middle while the two fiction sections have been both decreased in size and moved.

Moving to the main changes, in the intial layout, there was two fiction sites in the top and the front right of the bookstore, however, nowadays, the one fiction has been relocated by a Non-fiction while the other one fiction has been narrowed down. Additionally, because of the recolation of Art, Hobbies, Cookery in the centre of the bookstore leads some space building café and tables for resting and working.

Regarding other details, in the top of bookstore where Fiction used to stand, some facilities have been added, including Art, Hobbies and Cookery. While a Non-fiction is also relocated by a coffee shop, there are no changes in Travel, New books, Service desk sites which stand in front of the entrance.

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There is a lack of coherence and clarity in your presentation based on these 2 problem references. You claim in the summary overview that the diagram shows the changes that are yet to take place at the bookstore. Yet, in the next paragraph, you are indicating that the changes have already been implemented and are existing already in the space provided. There is a time reference problem in the presentation that will affect your C+C and GRA scores due to the confusion that your conflicting statements have created for the reader.


Incorrect vocabulary usage. You are referring to the plural version of was in this sentence. Use the term "were".

You have made a good effort in writing this essay. It helped me spot the problem areas of your writing almost immediately. I look forward to reading improvements in your work with your next post.