The two maps illustrate a village in Stokeford before and after it was developed between 1930 and 2010.
Overall, over a period of 80 years, the town experienced a total transformation after the construction of some facilities and more buildings to provide more accommodation for residents.
In 1930, the major part of the town was for agriculture and farming, with a farmland in the west side and another, which was more vast, located in the eastern part of the village, and a bridge to connect two sides of the River Stoke. There was a primary school in the center of the village, with a post office, some to the south of the school.
Following construction, in 2030, the bridge and the post office remained the same as part of the development, the school was also retained, but expanded with two buildings for more students.
The most noticeable change was that both farmland on either side of the village and the shops were demolished, replaced by housing areas in order to make more places for individuals. Further developments were in the south side of the town, the gardens made way for a house for retired people.
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The summary overview does not meet the formatting requirement for the task. A summary overview should have at least 2-3 sentences in it to show that the writer actually found all of the important information for quick presentation in the paragraph. Do this in no more than 5 sentences.
The trending paragraph, along with other paragraphs in the essay are not GRA compliant since these are mostly composed of long sentences known as run-ons. The student must understand that the paragraphs require 3-5 sentences to satisfy the academic / professional presentation format / requirement of the essay. Each sentence must contain a single, specific thought or information presentation that will be connected in some theme focused manner to the rest of the individual information in the paragraph.
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