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What may be the causes of food shortage in the future? What can be done to prevent it?


phuongthao0411 1 / -  
Dec 11, 2021   #1

food shortage problem



Food is one of the most necessary part of human life but it's possible to be short in near future. This problem causes by some factors and gorvenments should have the act to prevent this situation immidiately.

First of all, the lack of food certainly comes from the rapid increasing of population which is faster than the food production, especially in many developing countries that have a higher rate of natural increase, which has led to the steep cost of some basic commodities such as rice has risen so much so many people can no longer afford them. Second, the high amount of inhabitants also lead to the climate change that causes drought and other weather conditions and exert the adverse effect on agriculture. Third, because of the lack of equipment, famers in developing countries use outdated farming methods which doesn't provide the efficent productivity.

Some solutions are suggested to deal with this worrying problem. World governmets and agencies should adopt strict measures to reduce the emission of greenhouse gases like encouraging people to use public transports, buy a hybrid car or plant trees around their houses. Not only that, deforestation and overgrazing need to be tightly controlled by the law beacause they are also the reasons that make the amount of food decrease. Developing countries may have many difficulties in finance and technology, the best solution is the helping from rich countries to learn and raise awareness associated with environmental problems and pratice skills of agriculture machinery.

In a nutshell, population increases and the shortage of equipment are the main factors for this vital dilenma and this can be solved by the clear-cut actions of gorvenments and state-organizations that may positively affect people in each country. It is predicted that this concerned trouble will easily and quickly resolved so no one will suffer from starvation.
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Dec 11, 2021   #2
This problem causes by some factors and gorvenments should have the act to prevent this situation immidiately.

Please offer clear responses to the questions provided. The examiner has no use for your empty repeat of the questions provided. Such an act cannot be scored as it is not part of the task accuracy requirement. For the task response requirement, you need to provide an outline of how you plan to respond to the questions by offering related single sentence references to the questions. Direct responses that you will be building upon in the reasoning paragraphs. These discussion outlines will help create a clear idea of what your opinion regarding the discussion is. These responses are what can be given a score in the accuracy section.

First of all, the lack of ...longer afford them.

You must avoid presenting connected ideas in a single sentence. This is a run-on sentence that, when divided only by commas, force the examiner to fail your score due to C+C and GRA problems in the presentation. Regardless of the number of reasons you present in the paragraph, if these are not properly formatted in the sentence presentations, the paragraph will still get a failing score.

Some solutions

You did a better job of explaining the solutions you believe will work in relation to the causes of food shortage. However, the solutions are still too numerous, with little developed explanations. So the C+C score will be lowered just the same.

You seem to have been misinformed as to how to write this test. You are not tested on the number of resaons you can provide. You are not going to pass the test just because you kept writing until the time ran out. You will only pass the test if the grammar requirements for English sentence writing are met. You will only be considered for a passing score if you effectively explain connected reasons in the paragraph, without confusing the presentation by using run-on sentences.

This is a good effort. There is evidence that you understand English questions well enough to provide acceptable responses. The problem, is that you are not presenting the response sentences in acceptable formats. Work on less run-on sentences, more connected reasoning topics and discussions, and the clarity of your explanations. These are the factors that will determine if you will pass or fail the test.


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