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"a merchant in the year 1000 CE" - a diary on the silk road


mrxkms 3 / 5  
Apr 12, 2011   #1
You are a merchant in the year 1000 CE going from your hometown to china on the Silk Road. Write a diary for a day on your journey.

My first trip on the Silk Road to China was a memorable one. It was a long journey to go through but I looked forward to it with great anticipation. We set off from Egypt. Our camels were loaded with a wide variety of goods such as pottery, gold, silver, ivory, precious stones, glass bottles and other expensive and desirable goods. The Silk Road extends from the Mediterranean region through Egypt, Persia and other areas until it reaches China. In reality there was no fixed road, but only a series of tracks that ran through steppe and desert. There were many oases that offered sustenance to the traveler. On my way to China, I could see a lot of amazing places that I had never had the chance to see, like Samarkand which is one of the oldest cities in the world and Bukhara which is considered to be one of the holiest cities in the Islamic world. There are still many sites of interest. One example is the Kalyan Minaret which was one of the tallest minarets in the Islamic world. The Kalyan Minaret is Bukhara's most prominent landmark. There were so many places to see and we need such a long time to compete our journey. In fact, I was immersed in the mystery and the magic of the Silk Road as a result of travelling to the exotic places which I had never been to before and which I will never forget.

Real Fog 5 / 26  
Apr 12, 2011   #2
There were so many places to see and we needed such a long time to compete our journey.

You write very well! It was easy to understand, which means your writing is incredibly clear.
P/S: I have been to both Bukhara and Samarkand. You should have visited Khiva also =)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Apr 14, 2011   #3
Let's simplify this sentence:
It was a long journey, to go through but I looked forward to it with great anticipation.

Nice ending!!---> In fact, I was immersed in the mystery and the magic of the Silk Road as a result of travelling to the exotic places which I had never been to before and which I will never forget.---it is possible to take out a few words, as I did, here. No big deal, though. This is good writing!
OP mrxkms 3 / 5  
Apr 15, 2011   #4
Thank you very much indeed.

I appreciate your corrections


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