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"In the middle of difficulty lies opportunity"; significant event or achievement


vj_justin 3 / 4  
Jan 15, 2009   #1
Am I answering the question?

What single event or achievement has been most significant in your life? What were the results of this event or achievement?

"In the middle of difficulty lies opportunity" Albert Einstein

In 2000, our family business was not doing well and our financial condition was very bad. My father was not in a position to finance my education. But because of these financial difficulties, at the age of 18, I got the opportunity to get a first-hand experience in business. For two years I was completely involved in business. It was a life-changing experience, which I think I could not have normally attained even in a five-year period.

My father has a construction business, mainly doing irrigation projects and small bridges for the government. It is a small business with 100-120 employees. During that period, there was a huge delay in getting the bills passed, even after the work is completed. The interest on the loans became a huge burden because of this delay. My father had to spend a lot of time in getting the bills passed, but that affected the functioning of ongoing projects. I was doing my pre-bachelor degree then. I was not interested in business and was planning to go for engineering. But I had to put aside my dream and help my father, even before my exams were over.

Initially my father had given me only the accounting tasks. I had to keep track of the employees and their salaries. I also had to monitor the stock of equipment. I learned many things within short time; preparation and submission of quotations, arrangement of funds, doing the complicated calculations involving kilograms of cement and cubic meters of sand and rubble, and keeping track of work completed and money spent. Gradually he gave me more important duties. After one year, I was responsible for managing employees and monitoring the work. I also began interacting with suppliers and government officials. Since I started taking care of many things, he got sufficient time to follow up and get the bills passed at the earliest. Gradually our business was on the track again.

I still wanted to complete my formal education. After overcoming the financial difficulties, I joined for graduation. Even though I got less marks in my pre-degree, my attitude towards the business was completely changed by that time. I became a new person with added enthusiasm, confidence and experience. My decision to join MBA, to some extend, roots back to my experience in family business.
Abby002 3 / 24  
Jan 15, 2009   #2
Hi Justin,

You did pretty well in the first part. However, you did not answer the second question.

What were the results of this event or achievement?
This question is asking you to consider what do you achieve or learn from your family's business. Was this experience help to better your career goal?

Hope this will help.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 16, 2009   #3
Use a dash to separate these:

"In the middle of difficulty lies opportunity" -- Albert Einstein

Oh, great advice fro Abby!!! That is important. Answer all aspects of the question, and use words from the question to make it very clear that you did.

Let's get rid of some of this detail. It could detract from the strength of the essay:
My father has a construction business, and ...mainly doing irrigation projects and small bridges for the government. It is a small business with 100-120 employees . During that period, during what period? there was a huge delay

But I had to put aside my dream and help my father, even before my exams were over.

Good luck!!!

:)


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