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In 2005, there were 27 million homes in United Kingdom, and most of them in private hands


kobayakawa07 8 / 13  
Aug 13, 2016   #1
Task 1: The percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK

The proportion of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1985 and 2005 are presented in the pie charts. In 2005, there were 27 million homes which most of them are privately owned. However, both of privately owned and council rented contributed significantly in 1985.

In 2005, the privately owned gave virtually more than three-fourth of 27 million homes around UK which was the number one of contribution in housing owned and tented. The second place was given to council rented at around 15 per cent. While privately rented cintributed as same as council rented, there was only small percentage that showed in social housing.

More than half of 22 million homes in the UK were privately owned in 1985. The council rented in this year gave more proportion than in 2005 at around 30 per cent. On the other hand, privately rented contributed at certain number same as in 2005. However, there was a slight proportion that gave from social husing.




akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 13, 2016   #2
Hi Mahdi..
I have read your writing closely. Your creation is good, but it needs development. I hope you follow these instructions.
I personally believe you will show the impressive progress if you practice more and more.


The proportion of housing owned and rented in the UK ...
THE PIE CHARTS REVEAL A COMPARISON OF HOUSING OWNERSHIP IN THE UNITED KINGDOM FOR TWO DIFFERENT YEARS; 1985 AND 2005. OVERALL, IT IS IMPORTANT TO NOTE THAT WHILE THE PERCENTAGE OF PRIVATE AND SOCIAL HOUSES WITNESSED A MARKED GROWTH, OTHER FIGURES SHOWED A REVERSE TREND IN TIMELINE. IN ANY CASE, THERE HAD INCREASED IN THE NUMBERS OF RESIDENCES.

In 2005, there were 27 million homes which most of them are privately owned. However, both of privately owned and council rented contributed significantly in 1985.
Note: You still try to paraphrase your statement. Actually, you can change from an active to a passive sentence. However, you should use other words so that you can get the high score for the lexical resource. Following that, you need improving for the overview of the figures. You create the unique overview, but it is not explained detailed. Do not include the number. On the other hand, you should utilize transitive words appropriately.

While privately rented co ntributed as same as council rented, there was only small percentage SOLELY that showed in social housing(It's good since you compare the figures).

However MEANWHILE, there was a slight (...) from social ho using. - BE CAREFUL FOR MISS SPELLING.


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