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In the modern era, internet has become one of the greatest things in the world



Halim15 7 / 11  
Aug 13, 2016   #1
Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problem. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

In modern era, internet has become one of the greatest in the world. Some people could accept about the existence of it, but others are judgment opposite. I think that internet brings us advantages and disadvantages.


First of all, internet gives people many benefits. Because general public could access what is they want or what is going on. For instance, society can find many kinds of news or everything on it; students have opportunity to learn about lectures or doing their duty from university; the common reason is for using high or smart communication by internet even though people who are not in same place-in different country. High global communication makes people in the world easy to access or contact each other.


Unfortunately, internet has the bad influence for users if they are not supposed to read. However, this is bad thing for societies even children. According to the reason which is not support of internet, I think that is right opinion. Here, we need the bridge of this controversial with keeping security or privacy. In addition, parents can attend with their kids when they are working on it. As seen, both views giving common sense for all.


In conclusion, however I am very keen on because internet is undeniable in this modern era.

Risty01 10 / 16  
Aug 13, 2016   #2
Here my suggestion:
- one of the greatest technology in the world.
- Some people argue that ,,, (why people agree or disagree), while others ,,, (directly mention about disadvantage or advantage) .
My suggestion, make clear your introduction that related with the question because it will represent your bodies paragraph.

keep trying.
ashelarisa48 36 / 47  
Aug 13, 2016   #3
Hai Halim, you did it well! I am trying to add some feedbacks, here we go.

......., internet has become one of the greatest technology in the world.

......, but others are have judgment opposite the opposite judgment.

I think that internet brings us some advantages and disadvantages.

Because general public could access what is they want or what is going on much information about the world.

...students have opportunity to learn about lectures or doing to do their duty from university;

the common reason is for using high or smart communication people can communicate easier by internet even though they who are not in same place-in different country are in the different country.

Keep writing! Let's study more to improve our english!


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