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Modern medical science has made it possible to combat many diseases.



Pooneh1994 1 / -  
Jul 14, 2024   #1
Medical Science has significantly progressed since past time until now in order to grant the eternal wish of mortals: long life. Whether alchemists and physicians or philosophers, all considered the ultimate goal was immortality. And in this way, medical science seemed to be the only key to open this magical door.
Nowadays, health care system has demonstrated outstanding advancement in fighting and preventing diseases. Vaccines of poliomyelitis, chicken-pox and measles, which have saved the lives of several infants, are distinguished cases in point. Most of the ailments that were known fatal in past time, are no longer assumed as threat in modern science. In addition, health care facilities and establishments have expanded so far that nearly exist in all cities and people can access without difficulty. And the last issue to point out is the raised physical and mental awareness specially in life style. A better life style means living longer and healthier.
On the other hand, benefiting from long life has side effects on society. Retired elders who have no longer contribution to the economy and most of the time need individual care, are increasing day by day. This will encounter the country with resource shortage.
All in all, this topic has its pros and cons. However, in my judgment long life is like an endorphin injected to the blood which can rise the hope, ambition as well as optimism to a bright future.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
Jul 15, 2024   #2
Your essay will receive an immediate failing score. Your prompt restatement is nowhere near the original concept that was presented. The discussion is focused on long life, not immortality. Therefore, all your reference points and discussion representations are incorrect in the prompt paraphrase and writer's opinion. That means the essay's preliminary score will be that of a failing one. It does not remotely relate to the original discussion.

several infants

You are limiting the effects of the life saving drug and misleading the readers. You are confusing the truth with your fiction. Your C+C score will also be failing in this case. You are taking too many creative liberties in an opinion paper that should be based on publicly known facts.
taurus 2 / 2  
Jul 17, 2024   #3
health care -> the health care
known fatal in past time -> known as fatal in past time
specially -> especially
life style -> lifestyle


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