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IELTS 1 - Money Spent on Books - France and Austria spent the most


Linda91 30 / 40 3  
Feb 2, 2016   #1
The line graph shows the change in the amount of money spent on books in some countries from 1995 to 2005 and is measured in millions of US dollars. Overall, it can be seen that, France and Austria show the upward trend along period, but Germany and Italy experience a fluctuation over 11 years.

To begin, France and Austria spent most money on books. They began at a fairly similar level during 3 years. Then, in France, 1999 saw a gradual increase to around 10, but Austria witnessed a levelling off at 40 in that year until 2001. Afterwards, Money spent on book in France rise slightly for the remainder of the period, while Austria increase dramatically from 2001 to 2005.

Turning to other countries, released funds on books in Germany saw small growth during the period 1995 to 1999, but then fell steadily over the next 5 years. Next, there was a sudden rise from 2003 to 2005. Another country, Italy witnessed a slow increase during 2 years, but then declined slowly approximately 50 between 1997 and 1999. Finally, there was increased steadily to around 65 at the end of period.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Feb 2, 2016   #2
... money spent on books in some countries . THE PERIOD INDICATED INCLUDES THE YEARS from 1995 to 2005 and is measured in THE millions of US dollars. ... be seen that, France and Austria showED AN the upward trend along WITHIN THE period, but Germany and Italy experienceD a fluctuation over 11 years.

- I had to place a period at the end of your first sentence in order to create a longer overview that aligns itself with the minimum 3 sentence requirement. You had only 2 long sentences in this paragraph and that was just unacceptable in terms of formatting.

... Austria spent THE most money on books. T... similar level during OVER 3 years. Then, in 1999, France, 1999 saw ... around 10 MILLION FOR BOOK EXPENSES. , but WHILE Austria witnessed a levelling LEVELING off at 40 MILLION in that year until 2001. Afterwards, Money spent on book MONEY SPENT ON BOOKS in France rise ROSE slightly for... Austria increaseD ITS EXPENSES dramatically from 2001 to 2005.

... on books in Germany saw A small growth... to 1999, but then . THIS fell steadily ... sudden rise IN EXPENSES from 2003 to 2005. ... a slow increase during FOR 2 years, but then declined slowly TO EXPENSES OF approximately 50 MILLION between 1997... was A STEADY increased steadily to around 65 MILLION at the end of THE period.


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