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The motive of adults continue their study (IELTS task 1)



INA 6 / 12  
Nov 22, 2015   #1
The bar chart reveals the motive of the adult choose themselves to continue their study and it is measured by percentage, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of tuition costs should be funded. Overall, it can be seen that the main reason why adults decide to continue their study because they are interested with the subject. It also can be noticeable that the higher education cost should be funded by individual.

The majority of reason why people decide to study is interested with the course at 40%. In contrast, at 9%, meeting people become the last choice of people to take their study. Beside interested with the subject, gaining qualification and being helpful for the future job get the second and the third reasons of people determine to acquire knowledge.

According the pie chart, people having determined for the further education think that 40 percent of this cost should be shared by individuals who enroll to study. By contrast, taxpayer is as the lowest with 25%.


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Hanan125 4 / 9  
Nov 22, 2015   #2
I think it's a fine written work, however it would be better to include more details and numbers .
hasbi 29 / 41  
Nov 22, 2015   #3
... their study and it is measured by percentage , and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of tuition costs should be funded.

... education cost should be funded by THE individual.

The bar chart reveals the motive of the adult choose themselves to continue their study and the pie chart unveils people's opinion about how the cost of adult education should be done together. It is measured by percentage. Overall, it can be seen that the two main reasons why adults have continued their study are due to they are interested with the subject. It is also noticed that the survey also shown that most of the education cost should be funded by individuals themselves.

The majority of THE reason why people ...
Beside interested with the subject, gaining THE qualification and being helpful ...

According TO the pie chart, people having determined for the further education think that 40 percent of this cost should shared SHARE or SHOULD BE SHARED by individuals who enroll to study. By contrast, THE taxpayer is as DEPICTSthe lowest with 25%. the lowest proportion, at solely 25%


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