I'll move; my city is not capable to provide job vacancies for young specialists

Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.

I think its difficult to say what is better, to stay in one place or go to another one. It depends on what character person has, what goals he pursue in life. I'm a young person, consequently, I have an abundance of energy that I don't know how to manage with. Therefore, the best option for me is go to different places in order to find various opportunities to made myself. The reasons for my choice is listed below.

Firstly, my city is not capable to provide job vacancies for young specialists. Therefore, graduates attempt to find different ways for realize themselves somehow, and, gradually, they leave their native places in order to search the better conditions of living. This situation related not only to cities but to another countries. In addition, my field of study is not very developed in my country, so this is reason why I intend to move to another country to increase and update my knowledge.

Secondly, despite job problems, going from one place to another one is great chance to meet more interesting people and even make good friends. I remember my trip to USA and in the beginning I didn't know how people will treat me. So, it was a great surprise when I realize that community accepted me in very good way. After two years since I last time was in USA, we still in touch. So, this changing of place, gave me opportunity to enhance my contacts.

Thirdly, I believe that more you see then more you live. So, when you change places you explore to yourself new experience, discover a new way of living. Therefore, you trying to adapt yourself for absolutely new conditions which is good, because it would be useful for you in the future, especially for young people like me.

Summarizing all the above, If you are not satisfied with conditions of your recent place, don't waste your time to endure this, you have to fix your situation. In addition, going from one place to another is a chance to find yourself in this world and do what you truly want to do.

The biggest problem with this essay is its vocabulary. (I've cited some examples below.)

Really, the whole essay should explain the "better living conditions" to which you refer at some point.


This sentence isn't about you.


What does this mean?


What kinds of knowledge? Why does it matter?


What does this mean?


Explain this.


These paragraphs are about me. They need to be about you.

Thank you for your response.
I just need more practice to improve my writing.

Millions and millions of students do! It's a matter of practicing correctly.

Lots of people here (myself included) are willing to help.

Did my comments make sense? If not, I can try to clarify them.

I understood everything you've explained. Thank you.
Can you give me some tips how can i improve writing?

You need to introduce the topic in the introduction. It is not done here. You can get lots of help from the prompt itself, but present it with your own words. Once you introduce the topic then you should state your opinion.

For example;
Some people wish to continue living in one place throughout their life while some prefer to move from one place to another looking for opportunities. Jobs, facilities and living standards, weather conditions, community requirements etc. are among the main reasons why they prefer to move. In my case too, I do not wish to confine myself into one particular place for living. Rather, I would move from one city to another that offers me better opportunities.

That's kind of like asking me to explain outer space.

However, here are a couple of general pointers:

1. Watch American television. I don't care whether it's simple cartoons or sophisticated news programs. TV shows people speaking English and using words in their proper context.

2. Listen to American talk radio (not music). On radio, the speaker doesn't have the ability to show the listener what he means. He is forced to use words to paint a picture.

3. Read quality English writing. Not every newspaper article or editorial is free of errors in grammar or usage, but you'll learn a lot of words fast. Plus, you'll see how smart people arrange the parts of their sentences.

4. Practice writing. Note that I didn't just say, "write more." That doesn't help. Find a sequential writing curriculum and follow it.

5. Get quality feedback on your writing. The right teacher knows what matters and what doesn't (and he or she plans his curriculum accordingly).