traditional music is listen to everywhere by using our technology.
traditional music is
listened to everywhere by our technology.
and also music can listen
can be listened and you have many same errors like this one in your essay
music is used in various ways and also various functions
Music is used in various ways and it has various functions.
so music have very important in our life
so music is very important in our life
relief their stress feeling
relieve their stress
I hope it would help you and I think you probably should improve your grammer