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Natural Resources - Explain a situation, using specific reasons and examples



Khangquynh257 2 / 4  
May 30, 2020   #1
Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources, such as forests, animals or clean water.

Choose one resource that is disappearing and explain why it needs to be saved.


Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. (250 words)


There is a considerable decrease in natural resources such as animals, forests, and clean water nowadays. This essay elaborates on the importance of forests which need urgent protection from people around the world.

First, we consider forests as air filters which function like the Earth' lungs. Leaves of the trees take carbon dioxide in the air, sunlight and water to produce nutrition during the process of photosynthesis in which oxygen, a necessary chemical element for all living things, is released into the air. As the results, the atmosphere becomes cleaner and fresher with more oxygen and less carbon dioxide.

Second, forests play a vital role in reducing floods and landslides. Roots of trees, bushes and grass help to stop or slow water flows. Thanks to forests, fatal floods are in control, so death rate is low. Similarity trees and bushes help stabilize soil layers that helps to eliminate landslides, which are very dangerous for people and animals.

Lastly, forests are the safest habitats for many flora and fauna. If people keep destroying them for any reasons, there would be no home grounds for wild animals and plants. In Vietnam, forests have been being destroyed seriously in mountainous regions. As the results, many rare spices such as Sumatra and one-horn rhinoceros, trunk pigs and koala have come into extinction.

In conclusion, forests bring loads of benefits to living things around the world, especially human beings. Hence, protecting and preserving the forests is necessary to save living things on the planet. (250 words)

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15385  
May 30, 2020   #2
Actually, you wrote only 249 words. I am not sure how the missing word requirement will affect your score because I am not sure if you are writing a Task 2 essay or a TOEFL essay, or what. Please be clear about what sort of English exercise you are writing next time so that I will be able to slant my review towards your actual educational needs.

You must focus on developing your sentence structuring skills. You have a clear problem with word formation when it comes to your sentences. You need to familiarize yourself with the basic English grammar rules when it comes to writing. Pay specific attention to your singular - plural usage. Additionally, learn how to write words of ownership ( in reference to nouns - Earth's) These are the most evident problems that I spotted in your essay. Additionally, learning to use alternative words for the keywords in the prompt would also help you to score better. It shows a wider language vocabulary on your part. This will also help you with better sentence formatting.

Now, for the other problems. When referencing a series of connected words or phrases, always use a comma to help clarify the presentation ( Roots of trees, bushes, and grass). You should not always use adverbs in a sentence (very dangerous should be extremely dangerous) as the wrong use of adverbs tends to affect the clarity of the sentence presentation.

Your thought process is clear. Your presentations are somewhat clear, there are certain instances when your word formation does affect the clarity of the presentation but not to the point of it becoming non-understandable. Focus more on your sentence formation and word usage. Do some non-essay exercises to help you improve in that section. You can download apps for that. It is normally free to download and use.
syifabrina 1 / 2  
May 30, 2020   #3
Correctness for spelling, punctuation, etc:
1. ... natural resources, such as animals,
2. ... importance of forests, which need
4. ... sunlight, and water to
5. As a results, the atmosphere ...
6. ..., bushes, and grass
7. ..., so the death rate is low.
8. soil layers that helps to
9. ... them for any reasons
10. As a result ..., trunk pigs, and koala ...


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