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The news and information published by the media shape the public awareness in different ways



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Jun 15, 2020   #1
Q: Newspapers are having enormous influence on people's ideas and opinions.

Why is this the case? Is is a positive or negative development?



The news and information public by the media resulted in the prolong effect to the public concept and cognition.

Nowadays, people always spend much time on whether reading the newspaper or browsing the website. All the time, they highly exposure to the numerous knowledge which might relevant to the social events or public awareness. This will affect public opinions. For example, recently, the homosexual issue becomes much more imperative, if it compared to the past. Some people perhaps can not accept or even understanding about the content of this hot issue, and after learning by the social newspaper, they could receive this perspective or even become the homosexual people.

Some people argue that this situation could be a negative phenomenon. Nonetheless, others believe that is the positive improvement. For people who reckon that is a drawback may consider individuals will easily be affected by absorbing the idea without critical thinking. However, for others who seem this influence as the bright side might argue that human can not live without using the website or the internet. As it will cause the social distancing that people will feel isolated and disconnected with this world. If human can have the critical thinking ability, it dosa not matter that the information people received will make the effect on them because they can distinguish which one should be took into account and which one should be ignored.

In conclusion, acknowledge and news people gained from any media, it must cause some effect. Sometimes are advantage to human, but sometimes are not. People do not have to accuse this development is the benefit or not. The only thing people need to do just take into consideration no matter what they knew instead of directly believing the information without hesitation.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15357  
Jun 16, 2020   #2
Your prompt paraphrase is incomplete. As you can see, your presentation lacks the 3-5 sentence requirement for the paraphrase. You should have presented:
- A topic restatement
- Response to question 1
- Response to question 2
- transition to the actual discussion

The prompt paraphrase serves to outline your discussion topics in the 2 reasoning paragraphs based upon your quick response to the 2 questions provided. The 2 reasoning paragraphs should provide the long discussion of the short response. That should have helped you to achieve a better formatted (as expected) essay presentation. Pay particular attention the instructions provided in this section and provide all the requirements. This section can help increase or decrease your final score.

Your second paragraph is not answering the first question directly. It does not help you explain your reasons in relation to why newspapers influence people's lives. It is a throw away paragraph that will not help increase your scoring possibility. You should have provided a direct response as to why this is the case. Instead, you only tried to explain the influence of newspapers, which was not the first question being asked.

The third paragraph is also incorrect. Rather than presenting a clear position on the topic, you decided to do a comparative discussion instead. The question is, do you YOU think it is a positive or negative development? Since scored on the clarity of your position, which in this case you failed to do, you cannot expect to get a passing score for the essay. You just did not offer a response that addresses the 2 questions posed for the discussion. So the essay did not follow the format for the discussion and did not properly discuss the topic either.

Your concluding paragraph is not a summary of your previous discussion. It is a continuing discussion of the given topic. That means, your essay is not concluded. You did not close the discussion at all. So all the work that you did in the essay did not help you achieve a passing score. Before you write another exercise, you should first familiarize yourself with the discussion requirements and format representations for each type of Task 2 questions. That way you will have an idea as to how to properly address the task you are given for the practice test.


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