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IELTS; İnformation about USA marriage and divorce rates



orxan88 5 / 8  
Jun 14, 2013   #1
The charts illustrate the rate of marrying and divorcing between 1970 and 2000 in the USA and the family status of grown-up Americans comperatively in two years.

The first chart shows that,the marriage level in US was at peak point with approximately 2.5 mln marriages in the first decade,then it fell steadily and reached to 2 mln in 2000.Other side,the number of divorced people increased to around 1.4 mln people in 1980,but then it began to decline and settled at the level of 1970 (about 1 mln).

In the second chart,it seems obviously that,the number of adult married people dramatically more than other marital statuses,although the most drop was observed in this category,around 10% comperatively in 1970 and 2000.Beside this,the figures for single adult people rose by 20% in 2000.The proportion of widowed and divorced grown-up people was nearly same,but just opposite the widowed , the divorced people showed growth over the same years.

Overall,the figures show that,the rate of marriages increasingly has fallen and conversely the number of never married and divorced people have risen slightly.


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dumi 1 / 6793  
Jun 14, 2013   #2
The charts illustrate the rate of marrying and divorcing between 1970 and 2000 in the USA and the family status of grown-up Americans comperatively in two years.

.... the charts do not talk about the rates, but the numbers. Also, it is better to talk about the two charts separately;
The first chart illustrates the changes in the numbers the marriages and divorces have taken place during 1970 to 2000 in the USA. The second chart shows the figures of marital status of American adults during 1970 to 2000.

In the second chart,it seemsobviously that (no comma) the number of adult married people dramatically more than other marital statuses,although the most drop was observed in this category,around 10% comperatively in 1970 and 2000.

... avoid redundant words and pay attention to punctuation rules.
OP orxan88 5 / 8  
Jun 19, 2013   #3
thank you veru much dumi...


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