You write well, but I feel you better improve on structure. Iwish you followed this structure for this task;Introduction
The given table show charges in weekly rental cost and annual needed salaries in three different suburbs of LondonOverview
In general, of the three locations, Notting Hill shows the highest and Fulham is the least in both rental cost and salaries.Details
It is apparently seen that the rental cost in Notting Hill is the most expensive requiring $375 to $738 weekly for one and three bedrooms and with needed salaries $98,500 to $194000 respectively. Fulham area is the cheapest cost of renting a property just cost $600 weekly and 157500 annually needed salaries for three bedrooms. In contrast, Regent's park just remains in the middle of two areas. Although renting a property in this area is quite higher starting $325 for one bedroom to $650 for three bedrooms and therefore you need $85,500 and 170,500 salaries depending on the number of bedrooms required.
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